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Vaskez vs Wayne
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12 lines exactly No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Minimum posts to vote: 50 Check in by: 08-23-05 at 07:02 PM Must drop verse in 1920 minutes after check in. |
Vaskez has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-23-05 11:03 AM.
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Wayne has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-23-05 01:41 PM.
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I smoke any that diss us we get to CLAPPIN-THE-STENCILS I POPING-U-PIMPLES i'll put a "END TO YALL MANUSKRIPTS' by fuckn SNAPING-YALL-PENCIALS
bitch this RAPING-IS-SIMPLE you all out of PLACE u CRAZY-DISGRACE I bust on "YA MOMS WILL TAKE CUMSHOTS" and call her BABY-FACE!! im DEMANDING-YA-HOES u cant OUTSTAND-ME-YA-KNO? cuz ppl feel frozen (aka Vaskez in the hood ) like they was STANDING-IN-SNOW leave u bleeding and UNSTABLE-WHEN-GLOCK-HITS- im a don u not ABLE-TO-POP-THIS cuz the flow send off "STATIC" like fucked up CABLE-BOXES nothing but VENOM-SPITS come out of these LIPS bullets tear flesh intill ya fuckn DENIM-RIPS cuz im fuckn up ya "NERVES" like im giveing the DENTIST-TIPS death will BEND-YA-LIPS and TENTET-BITCH if ya bitch open her legs ima be "LIKE A ANAL" i'll be IN-THE-SPLITS |
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Fat bastard wanted lunch before he checked in to post his verse I'd smack his chin, but gotta figure out which one to hit first I'ma make this bitch hurt, quick to diss flabby gits after checkin Started writing when I saw Wayne in...at 300 pounds was this cretin Never met 'im, but we expect Wayne to drop wack in confrontations Dumbass has "stand up" in his location... ............................but still falls short of expectations Battle has many connotations, for me, there's only the win to gain And if I was facing the loss........I'd just turn my back on Wayne Ya got no game and like to capitalise your rhymes like a beginner While I just capitalise on your wackness to emerge as the winner Even in 'er, ya girl says all she ever sees is you shrinking, shame Even the dictionary agrees: "decrease in size"=definition of Wane IF YOU DON'T GET THE WORDPLAY DON'T VOTE. Should be obvious, except maybe this one Wayne in = "weighin' in" (they sound the same) |
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Voted For: Vaskez
I Aint Even Got To Explain This Shit Yo HaHa Vaskez Took You Wayn You Suck Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
Voted For: Vaskez
Fat bastard wanted lunch before he checked in to post his verse I'd smack his chin, but gotta figure out which one to hit first I'ma make this bitch hurt, quick to diss flabby gits after checkin Started writing when I saw Wayne in...at 300 pounds was this cretin Never met 'im, but we expect Wayne to drop wack in confrontations Dumbass has "stand up" in his location... ............................but still falls short of expectations Battle has many connotations, for me, there's only the win to gain And if I was facing the loss........I'd just turn my back on Wayne Even in 'er, ya girl says all she ever sees is you shrinking, shame Even the dictionary agrees: "decrease in size"=definition of Wane vs nothing v/Vaskez... he had better punches and wittier wordplay... Wane was one of my vocabulary words, thats a coincidence... yea I see you on here now...keep it up my nig Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
Voted For: Vaskez
Fat bastard wanted lunch before he checked in to post his verse I'd smack his chin, but gotta figure out which one to hit first ^^did he ever post his pic?..if so..post it..if not..fake personal..3/10 I'ma make this bitch hurt, quick to diss flabby gits after checkin Started writing when I saw Wayne in...at 300 pounds was this cretin ^^fat jokes again...just cuz he said he gotta go to lunch isn't proof that he's fat..3/10 Never met 'im, but we expect Wayne to drop wack in confrontations Dumbass has "stand up" in his location... ............................but still falls short of expectations ^^stand up/fall short lines are played..2/10 Battle has many connotations, for me, there's only the win to gain And if I was facing the loss........I'd just turn my back on Wayne ^^OK..ur best lines so far...4/10 Ya got no game and like to capitalise your rhymes like a beginner While I just capitalise on your wackness to emerge as the winner ^^not much of a punch..self glorifing..1/10 Even in 'er, ya girl says all she ever sees is you shrinking, shame Even the dictionary agrees: "decrease in size"=definition of Wane ^^coulda been better with some wording n shit..but it...5/10 OK..flow n structure was ite.But you had a lot of fat jokes in there..all becuz he said he was going to lunch.Just cuz he said he was goin to lunch doesn't mean he's fat.If he had posted a pic or something..then it'd be a good personal.U also had self glorifing as well.SG is good for filler or set-up....but not for a punch.that last bar with decrease in size coulda been far better as well. I smoke any that diss us we get to CLAPPIN-THE-STENCILS I POPING-U-PIMPLES i'll put a "END TO YALL MANUSKRIPTS' by fuckn SNAPING-YALL-PENCIALS bitch this RAPING-IS-SIMPLE you all out of PLACE u CRAZY-DISGRACE I bust on "YA MOMS WILL TAKE CUMSHOTS" and call her BABY-FACE!! im DEMANDING-YA-HOES u cant OUTSTAND-ME-YA-KNO? cuz ppl feel frozen (aka Vaskez in the hood ) like they was STANDING-IN-SNOW leave u bleeding and UNSTABLE-WHEN-GLOCK-HITS- im a don u not ABLE-TO-POP-THIS cuz the flow send off "STATIC" like fucked up CABLE-BOXES nothing but VENOM-SPITS come out of these LIPS bullets tear flesh intill ya fuckn DENIM-RIPS cuz im fuckn up ya "NERVES" like im giveing the DENTIST-TIPS death will BEND-YA-LIPS and TENTET-BITCH if ya bitch open her legs ima be "LIKE A ANAL" i'll be IN-THE-SPLITS OK...first off.That structure was horrible.I mean..damn.Don't write your shit in parahraphs no more.Write it line for line.Not all bunched upp together.I can't break it down line for line due to the structure.And I noticed you had some multis in there..but it didn't help.Multis can do wonders for your flow..if done right..you didn't use it right.Stop with the dashes,qoutations,n capitals as well.That kinda shit ain't neccesary.I also don't recall seeing any dope punches neither. Vote-Vaskez RTF BELOW http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=205271 |
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Voted For: Vaskez
Flow was great, vocab was nice, wordplay was nice also, overall better verse, V/Vaskez Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
aaaaaaah man! Can you people leave some proper feedback please? This shit just got reopened....
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Damn, it's good that votes get checked, but can't anyone vote properly on this site? Daaamn. up
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man this forum is wack, I vote on a load of battles and people either give wack feedback or don't bother voting on my battle
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Voted For: Vaskez
Fat bastard wanted lunch before he checked in to post his verse I'd smack his chin, but gotta figure out which one to hit first This was a nice punch, I've seen that kind of concept flipped many times before though I'ma make this bitch hurt, quick to diss flabby gits after checkin Started writing when I saw Wayne in...at 300 pounds was this cretin This was real nice as well, good wordplay and good punch Never met 'im, but we expect Wayne to drop wack in confrontations Dumbass has "stand up" in his location... ............................but still falls short of expectations Not bad, didn't make all that much sense though Battle has many connotations, for me, there's only the win to gain And if I was facing the loss........I'd just turn my back on Wayne Nice wordplay again. A real good verse so far Ya got no game and like to capitalise your rhymes like a beginner While I just capitalise on your wackness to emerge as the winner Filler, didn't like it at all, too simple Even in 'er, ya girl says all she ever sees is you shrinking, shame Even the dictionary agrees: "decrease in size"=definition of Wane lmao, that was pretty hot, good stuff I smoke any that diss us we get to CLAPPIN-THE-STENCILS I POPING-U-PIMPLES i'll put a "END TO YALL MANUSKRIPTS' by fuckn SNAPING-YALL-PENCIALS Good multi's, no real punch, and fuck your structure is horrible bitch this RAPING-IS-SIMPLE you all out of PLACE u CRAZY-DISGRACE I bust on "YA MOMS WILL TAKE CUMSHOTS" and call her BABY-FACE!! I'm gonna exclude saying good multi's, as I probably will in every line, so weak punch im DEMANDING-YA-HOES u cant OUTSTAND-ME-YA-KNO? cuz ppl feel frozen (aka Vaskez in the hood ) like they was STANDING-IN-SNOW Wordplay was alright, bit simple though, no real punch leave u bleeding and UNSTABLE-WHEN-GLOCK-HITS- im a don u not ABLE-TO-POP-THIS cuz the flow send off "STATIC" like fucked up CABLE-BOXES I liked the cable boxes wordplay, no punch again nothing but VENOM-SPITS come out of these LIPS bullets tear flesh intill ya fuckn DENIM-RIPS cuz im fuckn up ya "NERVES" like im giveing the DENTIST-TIPS death will BEND-YA-LIPS and TENTET-BITCH if ya bitch open her legs ima be "LIKE A ANAL" i'll be IN-THE-SPLITS Fuck almighty, this was stretched terribly, and no punch either Vaskez had a real hot verse, it would of had to have taken something real nice to beat that. Wayne, you need to get a decent structure cos your verse was one of the most stretched I've ever seen, good multi's though, also try and hit hard with punches. v/ Vaskez Wayne, could you drop a vote on my battle please: http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=206973 |
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Wayne, vote, thanks. |
sheeeeeeeeet. What I gotta do to get votes on this bitch? I've voted on loads battles. Upped it 50 damn times. Vote bitches!
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Voted For: Vaskez
Fat bastard wanted lunch before he checked in to post his verse I'd smack his chin, but gotta figure out which one to hit first 6...ok punch of qoute... I'ma make this bitch hurt, quick to diss flabby gits after checkin Started writing when I saw Wayne in...at 300 pounds was this cretin 5..ok... Never met 'im, but we expect Wayne to drop wack in confrontations Dumbass has "stand up" in his location... ............................but still falls short of expectations 6...good.. Battle has many connotations, for me, there's only the win to gain And if I was facing the loss........I'd just turn my back on Wayne 7...LOL...nice Ya got no game and like to capitalise your rhymes like a beginner While I just capitalise on your wackness to emerge as the winner 6...this is a personal too...he does do that newb capitalizations Even in 'er, ya girl says all she ever sees is you shrinking, shame Even the dictionary agrees: "decrease in size"=definition of Wane 6....nice personal I smoke any that diss us we get to CLAPPIN-THE-STENCILS I POPING-U-PIMPLES i'll put a "END TO YALL MANUSKRIPTS' by fuckn SNAPING-YALL-PENCIALS 1...i see no diss in there..get a 1 for havin some flow.. bitch this RAPING-IS-SIMPLE you all out of PLACE u CRAZY-DISGRACE I bust on "YA MOMS WILL TAKE CUMSHOTS" and call her BABY-FACE!! 1...no..mom shit is played...and ur wordin of this was whack.... im DEMANDING-YA-HOES u cant OUTSTAND-ME-YA-KNO? cuz ppl feel frozen (aka Vaskez in the hood ) like they was STANDING-IN-SNOW 2.....no... leave u bleeding and UNSTABLE-WHEN-GLOCK-HITS- im a don u not ABLE-TO-POP-THIS cuz the flow send off "STATIC" like fucked up CABLE-BOXES 1...no dissing...still.. nothing but VENOM-SPITS come out of these LIPS bullets tear flesh intill ya fuckn DENIM-RIPS cuz im fuckn up ya "NERVES" like im giveing the DENTIST-TIPS death will BEND-YA-LIPS and TENTET-BITCH if ya bitch open her legs ima be "LIKE A ANAL" i'll be IN-THE-SPLITS 1......still....throw punches....u ain;t doin it WOW...one-sided Wanye...ur structure was awful.First...stop with the annoyin capitilization.It doesn't make ur verse look good or nothing..just looks fuckin stupuid.And u focusing on flow to much.Ur multis and wat not...were forced as fuck.And I barely saw u diss.U were self glorifin and sayin some irrelevant shit.ELEVATE. Vote-Vaskez RTF below....or this vote will be removed http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=207213 |
Voted For: Vaskez
Fat bastard wanted lunch before he checked in to post his verse I'd smack his chin, but gotta figure out which one to hit first 6...simple but affective line, you got the statement to begin with and then hit him with the funny punchline. I'ma make this bitch hurt, quick to diss flabby gits after checkin Started writing when I saw Wayne in...at 300 pounds was this cretin 5...i get the wordplay, but this wasn't all that creative and funny. just ok. Never met 'im, but we expect Wayne to drop wack in confrontations Dumbass has "stand up" in his location... ............................but still falls short of expectations 6...decent punch, put up the words and flip em around to a punch. Battle has many connotations, for me, there's only the win to gain And if I was facing the loss........I'd just turn my back on Wayne 6...again another one where you state sumthin and flip it around to a punch, gud shit!! Ya got no game and like to capitalise your rhymes like a beginner While I just capitalise on your wackness to emerge as the winner 4...meh, this was weak, herbish style and not overly creative at all. Even in 'er, ya girl says all she ever sees is you shrinking, shame Even the dictionary agrees: "decrease in size"=definition of Wane 5...ok wordplay, but i wasn't really feelin this punch that much. OVERALL: 32/60 I smoke any that diss us we get to CLAPPIN-THE-STENCILS I POPING-U-PIMPLES i'll put a "END TO YALL MANUSKRIPTS' by fuckn SNAPING-YALL-PENCIALS 5...meh, ok multies but no real hard punch. bitch this RAPING-IS-SIMPLE you all out of PLACE u CRAZY-DISGRACE I bust on "YA MOMS WILL TAKE CUMSHOTS" and call her BABY-FACE!! 4...fuckin lines about ppl's mama's are played to fuck son. im DEMANDING-YA-HOES u cant OUTSTAND-ME-YA-KNO? cuz ppl feel frozen (aka Vaskez in the hood ) like they was STANDING-IN-SNOW 5...ok bit of wordplay in the 2nd line to it but not really hard at all. leave u bleeding and UNSTABLE-WHEN-GLOCK-HITS- im a don u not ABLE-TO-POP-THIS cuz the flow send off "STATIC" like fucked up CABLE-BOXES 5...again, the wordplay is cool but you are lacking with punches. nothing but VENOM-SPITS come out of these LIPS bullets tear flesh intill ya fuckn DENIM-RIPS cuz im fuckn up ya "NERVES" like im giveing the DENTIST-TIPS 5...i aint gonna say it again, wordplay :thumbup: punch :nono: death will BEND-YA-LIPS and TENTET-BITCH if ya bitch open her legs ima be "LIKE A ANAL" i'll be IN-THE-SPLITS 4...same as before, but this was wacker. OVERALL: 29/60 really, this came down to who was throwing punches and who was just freestyling some bullshit with wordplay and multies. wayne you got that multi shit locked and ure wordplay is cool sumtimes, but you need to flip shit into some punches cuz rite now you just got a bunch of shit. vaskez, some comical lines that i liked, you fell off towards the end but still had a more consistent verse WITH punches so you get the win here. V/ - Vaskez |
Voted For: Vaskez
I smoke any that diss us we get to CLAPPIN-THE-STENCILS I POPING-U-PIMPLES i'll put a "END TO YALL MANUSKRIPTS' by fuckn SNAPING-YALL-PENCIALS ^^^damn Stretched Opener....ight tho bitch this RAPING-IS-SIMPLE you all out of PLACE u CRAZY-DISGRACE I bust on "YA MOMS WILL TAKE CUMSHOTS" and call her BABY-FACE!! ^^^No weak punch Played im DEMANDING-YA-HOES u cant OUTSTAND-ME-YA-KNO? cuz ppl feel frozen (aka Vaskez in the hood ) like they was STANDING-IN-SNOW ^^^Ight Punch nuthin really good leave u bleeding and UNSTABLE-WHEN-GLOCK-HITS- im a don u not ABLE-TO-POP-THIS cuz the flow send off "STATIC" like fucked up CABLE-BOXES ^^^Good punch but to longgggg nothing but VENOM-SPITS come out of these LIPS bullets tear flesh intill ya fuckn DENIM-RIPS cuz im fuckn up ya "NERVES" like im giveing the DENTIST-TIPS death will BEND-YA-LIPS and TENTET-BITCH if ya bitch open her legs ima be "LIKE A ANAL" i'll be IN-THE-SPLITS ^^^wow......stretched but good use of multi's....an a good closer Fat bastard wanted lunch before he checked in to post his verse I'd smack his chin, but gotta figure out which one to hit first ^^^Lol Good Opener Funny I'ma make this bitch hurt, quick to diss flabby gits after checkin Started writing when I saw Wayne in...at 300 pounds was this cretin ^^^Good Punch...Lol... Never met 'im, but we expect Wayne to drop wack in confrontations Dumbass has "stand up" in his location... ............................but still falls short of expectations ^^^Ight punch....kinda played Battle has many connotations, for me, there's only the win to gain And if I was facing the loss........I'd just turn my back on Wayne ^^^Nice personal....playin him off Ya got no game and like to capitalise your rhymes like a beginner While I just capitalise on your wackness to emerge as the winner ^^^ok....nuthin special Even in 'er, ya girl says all she ever sees is you shrinking, shame Even the dictionary agrees: "decrease in size"=definition of Wane ^^^Hot Closer....lookin his name up lOl... V/Vaskez.....this was an ight battle....Wayne u had some good punchs but some played an stretched learn some new structure....an u had no personals...I felt like u jus keep goin on an on..Vas u had a Good solid verse that was consistent wit punchs an personals u had good structure in most yah verse....u took this battle easy...No hate...V/Vaskez |
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