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Lifes A Bitch
BoneCollector
Lifes a bitch...things happen that you dont want to.. People tell you things but..you just hope its untrue... Ina split second your life can change at a blink of an eye When people wish bad on u & leave u hung out to dry I remember my cousin drew...wish he was here till this day I remember all the things we did but now it just fades away My little cousin Jon was only 10 when his life was taken from me Crip'n aint easy thats what he said,i just tell myself his soul was set free Jarrett my nucca from way bacc,Why'd you have to rob that house Then.....steal that car.....And merk that spouse.. As for me...i was jumped when i was 13 ,lost my chain and ring.. I told my nucca's to squad up..and leave not one living thing.. Loading our rachets we fired at the opposing crew like goin to war I saw the guy's who had jumped....me layin on the floor.. I loaded my gun and fired letting all my anger out on them.. As the concret squares.........turned into blood red gems... I ask my self was it all worth it ? As i sit behind bars...? All this just leaves deep imaginary scars.. Hook Lifes a bitch what can i say?... Just to take it day by day... Everyone knows life is hard.. But never be taken off guard... Spray-Paint I should…be taking all the revenge and retribution, Devise a plan to exterminate all the mental pollution, There’s no time for disillusion, only a lifespan worth of exploring, Rather be finding the secrets than opening chests and leave blood pouring, Continue enduring, till I find the answer and start curing, Myself and everything, fix destiny, and answer death’s luring, Where would I be? Provoking thoughts might put me in the cemetery, Maybe I’m supposed to be there, easy to get shot by an adversary, Random deaths, unnamed bodies in the mortuary, Girls getting pregnant more times than they can carry, Babies growing up not knowing the face of their daddy, Asking themselves the same damn questions, growing up to getting fucked up like Stanley, So I’m writing a letter to god asking him these questions, Its time I pulled up my boots and stopped this questing, please I’m requesting. Hook x2 Lifes a bitch what can i say?... Just to take it day by day... Everyone knows life is hard.. But never be taken off guard... |
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Bump this can i get some feedback...
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I really like it.Was some deep shit. Id work on the hook but maybe it'd sound better wit a beat.My Fav lines by bone was
"My little cousin Jon was only 10 when his life was taken from me Crip'n aint easy thats what he said,i just tell myself his soul was set free Jarrett my nucca from way bacc,Why'd you have to rob that house Then.....steal that car.....And merk that spouse.." I was feelin that shit it had a real vibe to that shit I loved the way paint flow when he rap so I loved the whole muthafuckin verse "Rather be finding the secrets than opening chests and leave blood pouring, Continue enduring, till I find the answer and start curing," "Where would I be? Provoking thoughts might put me in the cemetery, Maybe I’m supposed to be there, easy to get shot by an adversary, Random deaths, unnamed bodies in the mortuary, Girls getting pregnant more times than they can carry," I LOved that shit You 2 need to do more shit |
I agree the hook kind of messed up the whole song. Other than that it was good, you had some good vocab in here. Than your strucure was decent you had a few strechted lines here and there that messd up the flow so work on that but overall this was a good piece
please leave return the favor http://community.rapverse.com/showt...120#post2431120 |
Life's A Bitch, son.. meh, pretty decent
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"I should…be taking all the revenge and retribution,
Devise a plan to exterminate all the mental pollution" ^^^^haha "I loaded my gun and fired letting all my anger out on them.. As the concret squares.........turned into blood red gems... I ask my self was it all worth it ? As i sit behind bars...? All this just leaves deep imaginary scars.." ^^^ much like my track with showdown lol |
Thaks upping for some more feedback
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good i liked it it would sound betta wit a beat liked the flow
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Bump this.....wats really good?
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pretty decent drop......i felt BC had more emotion than Spray but its strait......hook was aiight not too bad.....structure was aiight...flow was off at points but it was a pretty good read...keep it up fam......and rtf .....links in sig :thumbup:
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Word upping for some more feedback
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Nice drop, I think BC came a little better of the two. Nice little hook you had goin, too. I'll reply more in-depth tonight, i'm running out of time right now. :|
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Bump this.................
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dope drop by both, bone your verse was decent, i liked it tho,flow was god too.. i love your emotion, and how deep it was...
Spray paint your rhyming words are nice, good flow, verse was decent as well, but i still like it.. |
Word..upping for some more feedback
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what you know about life you only know how to hate youfr soul isn't worth a one plug nickel you hell bound
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^thank you for being banned
good bye. |
I'm sorry for the freepost but god damn, Shaft Get The Fuck Out Of The Forms Man, You Post The Most Stupid Shit.....If You keep comming atleast post something decent and quit fucking with bone collector, this shit just gets more annoying every day
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Bone
i think your really elevatin now, after readin this im gettin the feelin of a nice flow. you shorten your lines more so it flows now, you also have a good stucture. very good vocabulary and choices of words. you could up your creativty a little more give some eternal multiples to give it some depth. overall good Spray hmm you've done better before, your flow is weak and as is stucture. your vocabulary was insanly good, but some how made ya shit seemed forced, overall nice image to ya shit but i'd expect somin better from you next time. overall good collab can yall rtf on anything in my sig or anything in the forum dont matter 1 |
BC: It felt like your flow was a bit choppy in some parts, and that you forced some of the rhymes in places. Vocab wasnt over-done at all, in fact you coulda tossed more in to liven it up a little. The imagery was good, but your lackings brought it down a little. The best part about your piece would be the entire thing. It never got off-topic and the rhyme scheme was not too bad. Not going to mention structure b/c it doesnt really matter anyways.
SP: You had more consistant structure and flow, in my opinion, however towards the middle it felt like you were given up, then you rushed the ending. You had good vocab for the most part, all used in the right places and a few multies to liven it up a bit. Nice job bro. Overview: Nice drop BC/SP as always theres room for elevation, but you guys threw down quite well this time, keep it up! RTF -Metnalz |
^thankz for the feedback upping for some more
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Look on the bright side BC. Atleast you get free thread uppin' from Shaft's bitching. :p
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^lol word..but shaft's about to be banned so its all going to end soon
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OLE BOY RIGH THERE HEADED TO HELL BIG TIME
BONECOLLECTER bitch even as the prince of whales still be dense and prevail uncrowned you're fun clown so put your gun down mess around and shoot your toe you just a prostitute and hoe I dispute your flow your reputation is crap an infected but separation from rap will correct it. your brain is a funnel so drain that tunnel Of whachness you write a bundle of fact less lyrical material you not elevating You come with slop hating so why you get props for sedating real rapper bitch Your chapters itch for flavor and homey there ain’t none |
Can you make fun of all my threads please shaft, before you get banned. They need ups again. :thumbup:
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Tell Strobe To Retire Bonecollecter I Will Bitch Wiill Ban Me
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Your bitching doesnt annoy me in the slightest. It shows activity in the forums AND I find your posts quite ammusing... Not to mention your tenacity and perserverance of your quest to shut down an internet website, or whatever the fuck you're attemtping to do.
All in all, after a deeper view into this observation, I find your pressance oddly comforting. I now have full confedence in BC's decisions as a Mod if he is able to piss somebody off so much that they troll religiously on an internet rap site. Thanks for the amussment, keep it up. :thumbup: |
lifes a bitch huh?? yea nice piece, deep and prolly relevent to your past...i hear u...good drop Famo....keep doin ya thizzle
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You got banned for replying to others threads with the same BS you're spewing now? I'd ban you too, fucking moron. You need to jump out of the gene pool and never reproduce.
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Upping for some more feedbacc
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Hey Man Just Chill You're Asking For Something You Don't Deserve Come Man Be A Leader And Stop Making Bad Decisions
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