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RBTL Championship:[Champ] 13th Disciple (4-0) vs. Sureal (3-0)
Check In's are due MONDAY
Verses are due by TUESDAY Voting end's THURSDAY 16-48 lines long Topic... Alter Ego |
Checkin In , Good luck 13th .. . . . . . . .
have the title ready for me by tuesday! :) !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! - -OuT- -Sureal |
Ha Ha Ha......Checkin In.........I'll Be Keepin My Belt........................
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Alter Ego
time to get into the life on a man named Coolie Sheppard...........also known as 13th Disciple..............True Story............................................. ...or is it? Intro emotions already toppled and overexceeded the charts of anger pain and torment/a day was a moment of silence a week was actions of violence a month was holes in a building we rent had rather dwelled in a tent then occupying space wit a partner full of vengeance and scorn/once filled wit joy and delight but numerous fights causes feelings regretting the beginning of being born at nights i silently mourned and silently wept tears of frustration and emotional mental defeat/an invisible barricade separating our flesh from even connecting with the soles of our feet ingredients of barley and wheat in a liquidated state the liqour causes the mental to be perplex/mad at the fact discussing topics of problems after heated unimaginable sex actions complex wuz diagnosed wit schitzophrenia prescriptions for the moment kept my ALTER EGO hidden/but felt my EGO being ALTERED after purposely openin my pandoras box which is strictly forbidden one half luvs the kiddin and playin but concentration and medication kept the beast for a moment encaged/percieving an incredible act of violence from words changin into a monster when this hulk is enraged a certain spark engages systematic destruction in my emotional physical being/losin all control like a seizure the inner madness even detains the penises abilities to control the acts of peeing..... Climax already exhausted from a day of supportin my family but the lioness was in wait for her prey/walked into the predators territory steadily wishin i was one of the victims of timothy mcveigh tried to keep my anger at bay when informed one of my childrens blood samples should be analyzed to prove its my seed/knew only a matter of time to calamity but restraining cuz the eyes from the mouths that i feed keepin calm was a deed from continous bickering until finally she decided to take it to the limits/my disturbed and deranged ego was revealed from pictures of a nigga recently being in it now i'm in to win it conquer this battle wit death from my hands hearin screams as the door comes to a shut/choking wit all of my might her lifeforce slippin away can't believe i'm actually killing this slut 'daddy?'........'WHAT!!'.....comming back to my senses realizing my son was watching asking what am i doing to mommy/'daddy...are u mad because of the fact mother was laying in bed with her special friend Tommy?'.......... Resolution in myself it was good verses evil anger and love was emotions that dwelled and pertained/but it was anger and evil that controlled me......it was anger and evil that got me detained not legally sane was the verdict chosen for the brutal acts committed against all of my fam/believeing killing two of ur kids and their mother was acts of a satanic uncontrollable mentally disturbed man................ Proverbs 21:19 ....'better to dwell in the wilderness, then with a contentious and angry woman'........ Amen 1 |
Ok Imagine This...
Opening Video Games, Let Children's Minds Wander... Go To The Arcade, Money Thoughtlessly Squandered... But What Happens When Video Games Go To Far... Kid's Try to Buy Guns, Try To Drive Cars... Just Because Their Favourite Character Can... Lets Look At An Instance, Where It Began... The Story A Child Named Scott, Bitter And Lonely... Father had Left, And Mother Is Phony... Scott Was A Geek, DIdn't Have Any Friends... Only Thirteen, But His Thoughts Transcend... Making "A List" saying, "One Day I'll Make Amends"... But Scott Did Not Plan To Forgive... They Would Be Lucky , If He Let Them Live... Father When His Father Had Left, The Torment Begun... Left Scott one Thing ,Not Love, But His Gun... Father Never Knew, Complexity Of His First Born... Saw Life As A Rose, Yet, Scott Was A Thorn... Always Gettin In The Way And Never UseFul... Rage Filled, Fist Swung, Became Abuseful... Mother Through her Eyes, Her Son Is A Normal Child... His Thoughts Quite Different, Although Always Mild.. She Loved Him Like No Other, Every Single Day... Just Trying to Love Him, Always Pushed Away... He Was Always A Good Child, Nothing Done Wrong... Such A Genius, Could Sit And Freestyle A Full Song... The Plan Scott's Plan Was To Storm Them, Rush and Ambush... Too Far, All The Others Had Tormented and Pushed... No-One Would Expect This From The Quiet Young Man... It Was About Time, He Was Gonna Take His Stand... The Final Chapter The Day Had Come, Packed Up And Headed To School... Came In The Door, People Laughed At The 'Fool'... He Almost Pulled Out His Gun Right Then and There... But Then All of A Sudden, His Eye Started To Tear... Right There In The Hallway, He Fell Down And Cried... Not a Soul To Love, Nowhere To Confide... He Realized Now, This Was Not Destined To Be... But His Other Mind Took Over And Did Not Agree... Mind Set Scott Did Pull Out The Gun That Day And Raised Some Hell... But He Did Not Shoot The Other's ... He Turned On Himself... ------------------------------------------------------------ (If You Did Not Understand, He Was Kind Of Schizzophrenic...Hence The Alter Ego) |
I loved it Sureal, I was a little undecided, but your ending sealed the deal. Not to take anything away fro 13, dope verse, I was a little thrown off when he killed his kid, I don't think it needed to happen, what do I know though. My vote goes to Sureal though
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Yep^^^ Great battle ya'll but sureal just pulled out... was just feeling it ya know |
ok up 2-0...
Uppin for some more votes on this great topical matchup... come on guys, keep them pouring In... |
good comeback yo.............good luck...........................................
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And Just To Explain Sumthin....The Whole Killin The Kid THinG Wuz Suppose To THrow U Off.......That Was The Alter Ego Side.......Didn't See It Commin Did U.....Good Battle Tho.......Keep Commin WIt Dem Votes.....1
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Aight. I read this shit over and over. I liked both of the verses. I was feeling 13th a little bit more. I think it went to the topic better. No doubt there. That was a great topic for both Emcees. Personally I think 13th took this shit easily. He rode on the topic with out getting off of it. His whole thing had my attention.
Vote= 13th Disciple |
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just finished reading both verses 2wice...both were hella tight... sureal came back and pulled it out from the last battle... story lines were hott... but imma give this vote to sureal...he came wit it...so did 13th..but sureals ender was what sealed the win..in my opinion... 1 |
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yea............i feel 13gave it a little more raw and showed a better alter ego side.....1 return the favor...... http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=56617 |
3-2......u got the lead.............................................. ....................
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13.... that was a sick ass story..... i got the alter side by killin the kid...... overall you did a really good job on this and after reading it i thought you for sure had this but....
Sureal..... DAMN now that is a topical. I like the way you covered the whole scene of the story..... how you took it from all angles.... and your closer was some shit..... good shit guys keep it comin so my vote goes tooo......................SUREAL |
alright, 4-2 so far.. this one will be close shit...
good luck man, both were very nice drops... nothing but respect for my boy 13... |
13 and Sureal were Both Friggin Ill
That was a crazy ass alter ego battle But i gotta go with 13 On this one my vote go's to 13 Mad Man: Your vote will not count until it is explained better. 4-2 Sureal |
i disagree....................i think sureals too k this.................he had more heart...........and defiantly a more touching story........................also pretty original...............funny how most topial battlesend in suicide................
VOTE:sureal |
alright, 5-2 so far... uhm .. yea i think the suicide add alot more emotion at the end of the verse, like my last two lines hooked alot of people....
-Sureal |
good battle....but i think its gay how mad is taking my votes....either way.....its the internet.....good luck dawg..........1
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Aight. I read this shit over and over. I liked both of the verses. I was feeling 13th a little bit more. I think it went to the topic better. No doubt there. That was a great topic for both Emcees. Personally I think 13th took this shit easily. He rode on the topic with out getting off of it. His whole thing had my attention.
Vote= 13th Disciple ----I liked surreals whole view. the end was tight and it was deep. ^^^13th took this with jus momentem. i felt it, i imagined it, i lived it. vote=13 |
wow...if you ever wanted to read a good topical
battle this was it.....shit you guys, that fuckin masterful.. 13th - I liked ure shit. . very complex to a simple mans eye however. I figured halfway through your story what the ending was..a nice twist none the less Sureal - Damn im glad i dont have to go against you again... your shit didn't have the complexities that 13ths had, but still very easy to understand and read..the lines were a littile simple but the story was just addiciting...by your second to last paragraph i knew the ending tho..shit this is fuckin tough tha break down. . . 13th Disciple; Flow: 7 Vocab: 9.5 On topic: 9 Wordplay: 6 Shock effect: 7.5 Opener: 6 Ending: 8 Total : 53 pts Sureal ; Flow: 8 Vocab: 7 On Topic: 9.5 Wordplay: 7 Shock Effect: 9 Opener: 7 Ending: 9 Total : 56.5 pts Vote - Sureal (props to both ! ) |
BOTH WAS GOOD BUT 13TH STAYED ON TRACK, HIS LINES WERE LONG & IT SEEMED BETTER SINCE IT WAS READ IN TEXT, SUREAL ENDIN WAS GOOD BUT HIS OVERALL TOPIC WASNT AS ON POINT AS 13TH'S
VOTE=13TH |
6-4...actually 6-5...but whos counting..lol........appreciate the voting yall.....keep em coming............................................ ......1
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both came hard on this shit...i was feeln how sureal broke it down into like chapters and shiit, that was nice, but 2 me 13th..had a much better flow & the alter ego was more G u kno? lol...but naah seriously...13 & sureal both battled good..but when i read this by 13th..he won it..
"one half luvs the kiddin and playin but concentration and medication kept the beast for a moment encaged/percieving an incredible act of violence from words changin into a monster when this hulk is enraged" shiitz heated!! VOTE=13th DISCIPLE 1Luv Cin Ladin |
Hey 13, wouldn't you be pissed if someone said
"Close battle, but ima give it to Sureal" with nothing else said. Those votes need to be explained. Sureal - 6 13 - 5 |
I Feel Ya Mad....I Ain't Bitchin...lol...........This Is A Good Battle.......
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ok , yup 6 -5 so far, but i did not understand
g-unit brooklyns reason... HIS LINES WERE LONG & IT SEEMED BETTER SINCE IT WAS READ IN TEXT it would obviously be READ in TEXT ... and he wins cuz his lines are longer? w/e you can keep that vote, but that juss' seems fucked... -Sureal |
how bout we just take all of my votes?.....6 surreal 0 disciple......i don't think so tim....lol.............up......................... .........................1
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!3th Was really Good a great story
the concept was great But....Sureals was a lil bit better Was undecided till Sureal's ending was tight good structure an i liked the way you preceived it... Vote - sureal |
Yo, i really liked what u 2 were rappin bout but like other people said Sureals ending was actually pretty kool. 13's was awesome too bout the kid and his wife. But I some times got lost readin 13's verse and I was RIGHT on SUREALS verse the whole time.Thats just me though.GOOD BATTLE u 2
vote=Sureal |
Both was real good.It was a nice topic to try to get at and both of yall did a good job.I liked Sureal's song better.It's like when you watch a movie and you get a suprise ending.Both was real good.I'm going to have to enter the next.:)
Of course I want someone to return the favor.http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=58686 |
okay......not sayin nuthin bout those votes.....anyways......uppin........looks like u might be stealin my belt kiddo............................................. ........................1
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damn... this shit was hard to vote fo... both of the drops had equal talent... topics were well done
sureal's style was good, so was 13ths like he always has |
sorry about that...rest of it
i thought 13ths overall was better... a lot harder competition than phrantik huh 13 ha? good battle tho, i liked 13's more... felt his story |
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^^^^^^^^DAMN could have explained it more than that 13.....he got you this time...............dawg........... |
ok i counted and 10-6 so far... lets keep these votes rollin' in
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damn this is gonna be hard to vote on...and plus i dont usually like anything text related...lol...but yo sumone asked for me to peep this, so im gonna peep this shit fairly...
13th disCiple: i liked ure stuff alot...wordplay wuz really good...an important element in text...bKillin that bKid wuz Cool man...i dunno why erone trippin lol... Sureal: i liked ure stuff too...the story wuz more easier to Comprehend...however you laCCed wordplay in ure verse, but you made it up in the ' easy reading'...lol...and i like the end...it wuz twisted but not too twisted so it wuz Cool this is gonna be a hard vote...fuCC i'll be baCC wit my vote...lol |
^^what happened to your other account with like over 200 posts, and that was not new?
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SUREAL.... sorry but u wasnt keepin me interested......now 13th's did....betta wordplay......betta flo.........jus feelin his betta
ma vote- 13th... holla front im GhOSt.................... |
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