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Alter Ego

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Checkin In , Good luck 13th .. . . . . . . .

have the title ready for me by tuesday!

!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! - -OuT-

-Sureal

Ha Ha Ha......Checkin In.........I'll Be Keepin My Belt........................
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Alter Ego


time to get into the life on a man named Coolie Sheppard...........also known as 13th Disciple..............True Story............................................. ...or is it?




Intro

emotions already toppled and overexceeded the charts of anger
pain and torment/a day was a moment of silence a week was
actions of violence a month was holes in a building we rent

had rather dwelled in a tent then occupying space wit a partner
full of vengeance and scorn/once filled wit joy and delight but
numerous fights causes feelings regretting the beginning of being born

at nights i silently mourned and silently wept tears of frustration
and emotional mental defeat/an invisible barricade separating
our flesh from even connecting with the soles of our feet

ingredients of barley and wheat in a liquidated state the liqour
causes the mental to be perplex/mad at the fact discussing topics
of problems after heated unimaginable sex

actions complex wuz diagnosed wit schitzophrenia prescriptions
for the moment kept my ALTER EGO hidden/but felt my EGO being
ALTERED after purposely openin my pandoras box which is strictly
forbidden

one half luvs the kiddin and playin but concentration and
medication kept the beast for a moment encaged/percieving an
incredible act of violence from words changin into a monster when
this hulk is enraged

a certain spark engages systematic destruction in my emotional
physical being/losin all control like a seizure the inner madness even detains the penises abilities to control the acts of peeing.....


Climax

already exhausted from a day of supportin my family but the
lioness was in wait for her prey/walked into the predators
territory steadily wishin i was one of the victims of timothy mcveigh

tried to keep my anger at bay when informed one of my childrens
blood samples should be analyzed to prove its my seed/knew
only a matter of time to calamity but restraining cuz the eyes from
the mouths that i feed

keepin calm was a deed from continous bickering until finally she
decided to take it to the limits/my disturbed and deranged ego
was revealed from pictures of a nigga recently being in it

now i'm in to win it conquer this battle wit death from my hands
hearin screams as the door comes to a shut/choking wit all of my
might her lifeforce slippin away can't believe i'm actually killing
this slut

'daddy?'........'WHAT!!'.....comming back to my senses realizing my
son was watching asking what am i doing to mommy/'daddy...are
u mad because of the fact mother was laying in bed with her
special friend Tommy?'..........


Resolution

in myself it was good verses evil anger and love was emotions
that dwelled and pertained/but it was anger and evil that
controlled me......it was anger and evil that got me detained

not legally sane was the verdict chosen for the brutal acts
committed against all of my fam/believeing killing two of ur kids
and their mother was acts of a satanic uncontrollable mentally
disturbed man................









Proverbs 21:19 ....'better to dwell in the wilderness, then with a
contentious and angry woman'........



















Amen























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Ok Imagine This...

Opening
Video Games, Let Children's Minds Wander...
Go To The Arcade, Money Thoughtlessly Squandered...
But What Happens When Video Games Go To Far...
Kid's Try to Buy Guns, Try To Drive Cars...
Just Because Their Favourite Character Can...
Lets Look At An Instance, Where It Began...

The Story
A Child Named Scott, Bitter And Lonely...
Father had Left, And Mother Is Phony...
Scott Was A Geek, DIdn't Have Any Friends...
Only Thirteen, But His Thoughts Transcend...
Making "A List" saying, "One Day I'll Make Amends"...
But Scott Did Not Plan To Forgive...
They Would Be Lucky , If He Let Them Live...

Father
When His Father Had Left, The Torment Begun...
Left Scott one Thing ,Not Love, But His Gun...
Father Never Knew, Complexity Of His First Born...
Saw Life As A Rose, Yet, Scott Was A Thorn...
Always Gettin In The Way And Never UseFul...
Rage Filled, Fist Swung, Became Abuseful...

Mother
Through her Eyes, Her Son Is A Normal Child...
His Thoughts Quite Different, Although Always Mild..
She Loved Him Like No Other, Every Single Day...
Just Trying to Love Him, Always Pushed Away...
He Was Always A Good Child, Nothing Done Wrong...
Such A Genius, Could Sit And Freestyle A Full Song...

The Plan
Scott's Plan Was To Storm Them, Rush and Ambush...
Too Far, All The Others Had Tormented and Pushed...
No-One Would Expect This From The Quiet Young Man...
It Was About Time, He Was Gonna Take His Stand...

The Final Chapter
The Day Had Come, Packed Up And Headed To School...
Came In The Door, People Laughed At The 'Fool'...
He Almost Pulled Out His Gun Right Then and There...
But Then All of A Sudden, His Eye Started To Tear...
Right There In The Hallway, He Fell Down And Cried...
Not a Soul To Love, Nowhere To Confide...
He Realized Now, This Was Not Destined To Be...
But His Other Mind Took Over And Did Not Agree...

Mind Set
Scott Did Pull Out The Gun That Day And Raised Some Hell...
But He Did Not Shoot The Other's ... He Turned On Himself...

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(If You Did Not Understand, He Was Kind Of Schizzophrenic...Hence The Alter Ego)

I loved it Sureal, I was a little undecided, but your ending sealed the deal. Not to take anything away fro 13, dope verse, I was a little thrown off when he killed his kid, I don't think it needed to happen, what do I know though. My vote goes to Sureal though

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Yep^^^

Great battle ya'll but sureal just pulled out... was just feeling it ya know

ok up 2-0...

Uppin for some more votes on this great topical matchup...

come on guys, keep them pouring In...

good comeback yo.............good luck...........................................
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And Just To Explain Sumthin....The Whole Killin The Kid THinG Wuz Suppose To THrow U Off.......That Was The Alter Ego Side.......Didn't See It Commin Did U.....Good Battle Tho.......Keep Commin WIt Dem Votes.....1

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Aight. I read this shit over and over. I liked both of the verses. I was feeling 13th a little bit more. I think it went to the topic better. No doubt there. That was a great topic for both Emcees. Personally I think 13th took this shit easily. He rode on the topic with out getting off of it. His whole thing had my attention.

Vote= 13th Disciple

just finished reading both verses 2wice...both were hella tight...
sureal came back and pulled it out from the last battle...
story lines were hott...
but imma give this vote to sureal...he came wit it...so did 13th..but sureals ender was what sealed the win..in my opinion...
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yea............i feel 13gave it a little more raw and showed a better alter ego side.....1

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