a little somethin my girl worte me
 

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Jay-R - The Mic Life

Aight a little thing that my girl wrote me and i want feedback so holla

you made me write this rap, so i guess here goes,
but i'm not gonna promise that i'll have any flow.
i miss you so much, from my head to my toes
and how much a want you here, can't nobody know.
i feel like a loser just to write this rap,
just so you know, you got yourself in this trap.
and you and i know it's just a peice of crap,
but you love me too much to tell me that.
it's crazy- how eighty-seven miles can make
such a stupid situation that's so hard to take.
sometimes i feel like i'm about to break
but we're keepin it together for each other's sake.
so i'm counting the days until i see you again,
14 days of busy, plus one for your friends.
having you inside me is the only way to mend
my broken heart, i miss you, and i fully intend
to be your baby's mama for as long as you'll be
my lover and my best friend-and some day i see
us in love and so much older, we will finally be free.
and i'm hopin that forever it will be you and me.

drop you honest opinion thanks

come on^^^^^ its short just read it and drop a line or two, holla back

why i am giving feedback to her and not to you is beyond me

by the way, i dont have beef with you anymore..

She had a decent flow, overall it was basic but not too bad

Hope she gets better

thanks alot i'm cool too, thanks for bein honest i'm glad you were the bigger man cause i was bein kinda stuborn, anyways still UPPIN FO FEEDBACK

come on^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

uppin come on holla back!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

it was aiight, but why you need to have our opinions? (Just a thought) If she's yo gurl an' all, you shouldn't care about whut other people think about it. Just as long as it holds something fo' you in yo' heart.

She obviously cares about you. Good luck wit that.
Much respect

pretty good, she seemed kind of embaressed..from why am i rapping...hat line but it was good, basic but for a first nice try..pz man

ok...number one u need to get off rb and go get ur girl.....anyway it was good, she decent, well...yeah decent....tell her she was aiight, and rapping could be a nice lil hobby for her...thas abotu it

reciprocate the love, check words you can feel and nada by sublime d in open mic

holla back come on................................................ .......................

still uppin^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^come on read and post honestly its not that hard

having you inside me is the only way to mend

judging by this did she want u to post this on the internet
for people in thailand, england, and the nieghborhood bitch down the street who will dig up anything to bitch about to hear this?
or
is she just a slut and expects hoards of men to try and bone
her while shes not looking.
^^not trying to diss ya girl but mabey she wanted privacy with her thoughts.
Heads up shes better than half the herbs on here.

yeah it was obvious she aint in2 flowin but since she admits it then i wont knock that part of the verse... def needs work BUT for a nonmcee it has a lil potential in it... the lyrics seemed like they were put down in a rush n unexpectedly but i guesss she gets an A for the overall effort.. not 2 mention... if shes a brand newbie in ths perfesion then hey... u gotta start somewhere.. practice makes perfect or at least the pure opposite as far most rappers in the game nowa days.1

cool anymore^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ ^^^^^^^^^^^uppin

feedback
 

firstoff.. I feel weird postin replies on someone's thing that the artist didnt submit.. anyways.. your girl seems shy and she seems alone.. needin someone.. whats your girls phone # mabye il call her up and tell her this feedback one on one.. but since im usin this as one of my replies... here it goes even tho if she doesnt wanna be a rapper and is just doing this to please your fantasy of havin a female emcee as a gf... ok..
pros:
flow was ok
last part was good
basic, but cool

cons:
first part.. but u copped to your weakness early off so it setup the song i guess..
a lil short

yo return the fav and drop some feedback on one of my open mics :) (in my sig)