Typical vs phatinum
 

Battle Rules:

10 - Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting
no feeding
no sucking

Minimum posts to vote: 1

Check in by: 08-01-04 at 08:06 PM

Must drop verse in 30 minutes after check in.

Typical has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-01-04 07:37 PM.

phatinum has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-01-04 07:46 PM.

Hey yo ill crack open up ya skull like a can of beans
watch out im a open up your thoughts b spillin ya dreams
I heard you suck dicks till you scream bleed time 4 a daily feed
You fuck boys annually with speed there’s no need 4 dis greed
Its only dick but I know you’re a pussy with no dick inside
Ill rip you open like a young boy about to die choke now
cause you bout to cry no point cryin say your big
cause you got more pubic hairs then a lion stop lying
times up tick tock o smash ya spine cored in shock
peace out nigga im shooting ya wid my bullets on lock

ayo its time to bring the lesson in session/
dis nigga got murdered 7 times n still aint make it to heaven/*
dis nigga claim he from da ghetto actin like he so hood/
i guess da NG in his crew name stands for no good/
for real do u spit da worst verse i read/
da only thing phat will b ur lips when my eyes get red/
he think he spit big but he aint hit puberdy/
his ryhmes r nice i spit brutaly/
trust me dude u booty cheeks/
get ya ass back to school before u move me 2 callin truency

This was feedback posted for phatinum
 

you need to workon some things such as ya structure is hard to read, try lining up the rhyming words but you'll get better with time

upin>>>>..............................................

Voted For: Typical

both need to get better but my vote goes to typical cuz i was feelin his punches and flow more....eve the the 5th & 6th lines was a little whack..overall his verse was better than the other guys

upin!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

can some one please vote on this.

upin

Voted For: Typical

Flow: phatinum
Structure: phatinum
Punches: Typical
Personalz: Typical
Vocab: Typical

VOTE: Typical

For a text battle phat's verse didnt rhyme well...
Creativity: Typical
Enjoyment: Typical

upin 4 votes

Voted For: Typical

im gonna havta give this ta typical cause his punches were connecting ok personal bout the record thingy,i dint like the fake personal bout the ng thing..he dosent have those letters in his name...nothing really special in this battle...phat i could'nt give it ta ya cause 3 of your lines dint ryme..your structures pickin up...keep tryin dawg..work on your punches n you'll win some battles...pc
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