Yvonne-Bump This (fuck a writers Block)...the deal remains the same>>i'll RTF!
 

you sound tired but, ya voice....is still....sexy
i like this beat actually. not my steez but i like it. flow's on point, actually im feelin ya flow here better than any of ya other tracks. lyrics is simple, guessin its the writers block, but i like the rhyme scheme. got some internals goin on every once in a while. hook is simple, needs some layers. catchy tho. you should redo this track, n produce it like you want ppl to listen, not like your just tryna crack the writers block. woulda came out nice. pz

beats different, but it works.

hook sounds decent but kind of raw if u get me.

flows on, boice aint hyped more laid back but works with the lyrics so thats cool.

decent track yeah.

Listenin' like the lil pic u got btw, lol remember when we first talked ha we gotta do that again..

mic quality is diff u get sumin new?

hook is a good idea, wud be more catchy with a different way of delivering it..

yo voice is like an european version of foxy brown, work on the pronouncation and youll sound really marketable, flow is pretty good, lyrics aight still bumpable, hook is catchy jus ya pronounciation is puttin me off but like how you said "bump this", if you went to america and stayed there a lil more your pronounciation would be much better,

thats the only thing you need work on,

I dont think you need to hype more, i like ya laid back gangsta shit, so thats it, work on pronounciation and then you got it shorty, and maybe get a lil more confident, more energy but still keep it laid back..

you know tha deal

wut up girl!!!! at muh house imma bump this wordtihs was mixed decent but i can hear sum pops when u say anything startin wit b or p lyrics is cool imma bump this girl word i wanna collab wit u word

haa...I like how you list your feed



beat is unique...lacked production IMO


flow fits the beat well

nice soundin quality


pretty coo track



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I Thank You All


LMAO @ Prahject ...thanx bro!




that's wassup...anytime!





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eh not really feeling beat...its sounds striaight off a computer...but ya vocal quality is WAYYYYYYYYYYYYY better...flow is simple but good...I see u got ya pronounciation up...I am hearing every word clearly....hook sounds kinda like 50 cent an LL's joint bump this....same catch phrase an delivered almost exactly the same. Its decent tho...ok second verse u got same flow...u need to swtich up jus a lil, this beat is simple so u dont need alot of drastic flow swtiches jus subtle one to keep it enteresting, delivery was good, it was laidback but had intensity, u delivered it like u was talking shit to my face....good shit...lyrics was simple but effective...good joint def ya best shit sonically, keep it up fo real fo real....1

This is horrible. You suck. Get better. Good Luck. ;)

back off my girl, yea i said it :nono:

haha

^hahaha...calls anjali w/e her name maybe





thank you white boy!

i hate when someone starts their track off with a gang of excuses. if your shit is gonna be sub par, don't record it.

on that note, here goes the listen:

beat just jumped off and that shit already sounds ABC as fuck. you shoulda been blabbin and hypin it up so i couldn't tell it was made on a fisher price keyboard. the hooks alright, needs more layers and more effort. your rhymesche runs off sometimes. damn i just can't get around it, this beat is jsut ASS, sounds liek carson produced it. sometimes it's hard to make out some of the words in the middle of your sentences cuz you mush some of your sylables togethe. if you wanna keep using the type of flow you're usin, you gotta work on that annunciation to compensate for that shitty mic.

btw, noise gate is your friend. learn what it is and learn how to use it.


btw, eventually you're gonna have to make a choice whether you wanna go with a more regular paced flow or the faster pace that you use, cuz randomly mixing em in the verses is starting to get annoying.

after hesitating you eventually came in...

thank you anyways!