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Old 02-26-06, 01:44 PM   #1
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Aim For the Head (Mixtape type of Track)

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Some Kids who i record with every once in a while...... none of them, besides me, are part of my group TeamOne..... We used that Aim For the Head beat.... yea, the order is Livewire, Genocide, Free City, and Me

I came alil commercial on it... i might rerecord my part, cuz sumthin about my quality seemed alil off to me.... but werd, check it out..... Chitown representin

Aim For The Head

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Old 02-26-06, 05:02 PM   #2
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u know u wanna leave feed on this track
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Old 02-26-06, 05:34 PM   #3
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lmao...when I saw title I knew u remixed this song...great beat choice...always lvoed this beat....first verse got good quality an flow is koo but unchanging needed a switch up..delivery aint bad...coulda used sum more emotion..lyrics was on sum real generic street shit...woulda been ill if u came unique on this....next verse....quality drops a bit...flow is koo again..on sum generic shit lyrically was kinda weak if u spit like this u gotta come right wit the punches an dudes punches was wack IMO.....delivery is koo its laidback a goes wit dudes voice well.....3rd verse...same flow as others...Iw as waiting for oen yall to have different approach..same generic shit...delivery decent....4th kat same as others....this was koo generic shit..it was like a dipset collab...same shit for 4 verses jus different voices...none of yall separated yaselves from the others....but it would def get play on the block so stay up..........1


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Old 02-27-06, 09:32 PM   #4
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werd thanx.... i kinda redid my part.... so i uploaded a "newer version"
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Old 02-27-06, 09:50 PM   #5
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1st dude...loving the voice.....delivery is nice...real hood sounding...would get some play on the street....

2nd dude....nice switch up...delivery is cool...punches were kinda ehh...flow is different...he should actually work on making it more smooth...

3rd dude...like the voice...flow is coo....rush some words in a couple words....uses some decent multies....

4th dude....opener is sick....damn u got a lot better lol...flow is a lot nicer now...i thought u had the nicest verse....IMO.....all of em were pretty good and what not...

good shit...nice collab...id definitely be shoppin this song around the block is i was yall
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Old 02-28-06, 09:27 PM   #6
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cool...... if u need the favor returned...... just tell me
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Old 02-28-06, 10:46 PM   #7
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beat is coo

1st verse...flow is on...doesn't waiver much
Lyrics didn't catch my attention too much though


2nd verse...need more highs in vocals to match sound quality of 1st verse...flow is comparable...good

again...my mind wandered though...

not much in ur lyrics or delivery that's eye popping


is that a hook after the 2nd verse?...


iz coo


3rd verse...very good attempt at rhyming...but this track is missing a point

it's like yall are rapping but it's not hookin me


and this is a good sounding track...it's just not jumpin off


iono...

not bad tho fellas

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Old 03-01-06, 06:19 PM   #8
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yea, its a mixtape track...... but theres four of us, not 3?
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Old 03-01-06, 08:57 PM   #9
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iight im listenin to the top song...

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1st verse-nice flow....good delivery and lyrics...voice is pretty nice 2...could maybe be a lil more emotion but i still like the wasy the verse is now.....

2nd- flow is nice but fell off on one or two spots, emotion could be added a lil bit, but not too badd like it is...great lyrics...decent

3rd- ncie voice...nice ass flow, great delivery, good emotion...lyrics are nice 2...i dont know who spit on what verse but this is prolly mah fav. verse...nice shit

4th- haha at the rollup line...nice lyrics, good flow and emotion....this verse prolyl has the hardest punches...nice job on thsi shit

overall- this is a nice song yalll....great collabo..keep it up
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Old 03-01-06, 09:48 PM   #10
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im not gonna critique the each individual person cause it'll take too long.

but what i will say is that this should definitely be the song that you hand out to get some recognition around town. good collab. i always liked this beat and you all did a real good job with it. one of the more better collabs ive heard on RV

you all got some pretty good lyrics but the second dude could do a little better. and his quality sounded a little weird
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Old 03-05-06, 12:10 PM   #11
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this is pathetic..... wat do i needa do to get some feed muh fuckas
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Old 03-07-06, 12:14 AM   #12
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i gotta say i like the first dude.... was the best but an obvious difference ..after that couple fall offs in spots but who doesn t very easy beat to spit on but i like that shit...some decent lyrics ..but honestly it seemed like each person who followed was riding off the one before.i didn t see a single distinct individual on this. shit was aight not really my flavor of shit but its whatever..ithink all got talent just some difference in opinion ide assume stay fuxxin wit it!
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Old 10-17-06, 08:10 PM   #13
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this was a decent track
i liked the 1st dude the best
2nd and 3rd guy wasnt doin it for me
4th guy came 2nd best
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Old 10-17-06, 10:12 PM   #14
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shit is hot........what can i really say that hasn't been said.....o yea yall did better than cassidy....o yea fuck who ever doesn't agree.........

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i humbly ask for yall to peep my thread even thoe i didn't leave much feed.....

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Old 10-19-06, 08:18 AM   #15
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wow number 1 dude ripped it..flow was just goin on and on..voice i like it!..delivery was str8..presence was just right!

number 2 dude had a lil humor in a few lines..but he fell off flow at some spots!...breathe control!


number 3 : i liked the way he hops in..steady flow and delivery cud be worked on a lil but meh..e iight!..he had an adequate presence


number 4 : you had the right presence for ur lyrics,your flows fell off at some parts cos of breathe control,but yeah u ended this up in a decent way!
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