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….ThE qUeStIoNaBlE rAmBlInGs Of A MaDmAn….
….ThE qUeStIoNaBlE rAmBlInGs Of A MaDmAn…. Ask me.....the task may-be....... maybe my last key.... Who blasts by three's......?.. Influencing catastrophes.. Grasp or mask weapons....! While i pass the sentence.. If its contenders.... then who bathes in their presence.. Who’s message....less then.... orphans in the question.. im guessing...im destined... like you but with aggression.. im confessing... im only as grown as my comprehension.. The songs we mention.. Stomp-in or stopping lessons..? Its testing throughout…. Worse then bruising doubt… Fused to bout…cuz haters hate to lose. So gladly im out… An amount of worth…not the earth, which I found is worse Mound or revert.. its just our fears were all bound to verse.. The ground may hurt but in the end, were merely vapor Paced or….late or …braced for mistakes by our saviors Save yours…of course ignorance will..Occur in tours Realness of more …seal this by 2’s and 4’s outdoors… My questionable’s…at this time seem sensible to mine Ramblings are signs.. that a madman exists within my mind . . ¤ÐÅž¤ |
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ha first thing i notice were the hot multis and wordplay...
The ground may hurt but in the end, were merely vapor Paced or….late or …braced for mistakes by our saviors Save yours…of course ignorance will..Occur in tours Realness of more …seal this by 2’s and 4’s outdoors… ^my favorite portion and what not.. i'm feeling the concept and how you made it look as if a Madman worte it with the title being half capital and have lower case, and the break offs throughout the lines.. very creative and i dun think nobody hit this topic before it's very original.. stay up kid.. get at me. 1 |
thanx fiya..."call me kid...im older then you"!...
lol...sa'll good pumpkin..appreciate the feed........uppin... |
I'm to tired to leave feed, hit me up on msn if you want feed, lol, good shit Daz, nicely shaking the rust off man, good shit, liked the structure, and the concept, one of the better om's, okay vocab, overall coo drop, 8.5/10 ;)
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nice shit here vocab tight multies crazy wordplay was sick structre good flow tight
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you are pretty mad (for voting for marv) nah, just messing, this was a dope piece, i was enjoying how random it was, yet it all fit the context of the message you were geting across, good multies, very interesting to read, kept me reading, which is good, funny wordplay, haha, overall, this was just sizzling, keep up man.....there should be a feature open mic of the week or sump, and put this there, haha
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^^thanx for the feed kesse.........uppin
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nice OM, feelin wat u writin and wat u gettin at, nice multis
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thanx for the feed..^^tilt n the rest ill return feed sometime today
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oh, come on Daz and I thought you didnt write poetry. What I inspire ya! (LoL) Keep this shit comin not really to much bad anyone can say about this one.
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nah sweft i do topicals but specialize in battlin...lol
i might start poetry....but not for a while...this was just a trial run i suppose....more a concept ive been thinking bout for a while... |
I'lll leave three words for ya...Hall Of Fame...thats all this is some of the best usage of wordply and multis i've seen on RV( though i only been here a few months)...keep this shit up fam...10/10...rtf in my sig
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im glad you understood it, some didnt...lol.. ill be sure to return the favour when i get back online.... :thumbup: |
uppin............
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