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http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=185285

http://community.rapverse.com/showp...908&postcount=3
^^responded to..

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a down-ass chick, I keep my soul, mind & heart with separate keys
my’s goal’s to protect the family, even if I am left less than empty
once you cross a part of my blood, you just double-crossed me
next time I encounter your presence… u been hitting strike three
^^was feeling this...liked the strike 3 shit)
I dare you to hit my sister, bitch Iwill bust your shit wide open
we roll deep & leave yo’ block fucked up with every law broken
^^lol,....i gotta find me a girl thats like that...lol
your daughter is my niece, the newest addition, youngest limb(kin)
I’ll go out on a limb to protect a branch, no matter how or when
^^just readin that bar i thought kin instead of limb...dunno..get me?
I treat my niece like a daughter, teaching her to talk and stand
making her laugh, while my sister puts up wit’ this bitch 4 a man
luckily you didn’t see my face last night, I woulda changed plans
I returned home hearing a story of how the fam twerked your ass
^^werked ya ass???..
my sister left yo’ clothes in the street, you tried to get in her face
my brother got out his car, delivering fresh knuckles to your face
^^ohhh,...lol...nice flow
meanwhile I was walking on rocks with LJ, viewing the Lake (Michigan)
and the skyline, having a romantic night, and yo’ ass was dying
bleeding while my sister was wailing, her fist went the flying
seems like they took it easy on you, or the story missing details
I’d throw a cocktail thru your car window in yo’ lap, try this female
^^damn gurl...emotions stirring ..im feeling this
and I’ll slap your pussy ass right in the cranium with a loose brick
so keep hiding, me and my sister’s cousin coming after you bitch
^^
you better hope it’s the last time I use my body for a fatal weapon
if U get near me, on ur neck.. my imprint’s will be permanently left in
^^DAMN GURL.........i was like ya ill read a lil fiya topical...
this was mothafuckin brutal honesty....damn i love fiestyness in fems

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nice drop pumpkin.. rofl...
RTF if ya'd like.........i seriously enjoyed this read...(great emotion gurl)

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i'll play on ya consience, ya contents is complete nonsense
speak of biting, then you fucks flip everyone of my damn concepts
what the fuck, was you high..?
did you think i wouldn't recognize lines that i made
then you come up some bullshit tryna prove that im gay...!
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fake fucks..move on...!

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...thanx y'all it's greatly appreciated...........

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fiya..drop some feed on my madman drop..its short :thumbsup:

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i'll play on ya consience, ya contents is complete nonsense
speak of biting, then you fucks flip everyone of my damn concepts
what the fuck, was you high..?
did you think i wouldn't recognize lines that i made
then you come up some bullshit tryna prove that im gay...!
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fake fucks..move on...!

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the first half was decen i like how u build up ya anger as i read on, but these lines is where i started to open my eyes like wow ma is def on fire...


a down-ass chick, I keep my soul, mind & heart with separate keys
my’s goal’s to protect the family, even if I am left less than empty
ha nice shit here feeling it...

once you cross a part of my blood, you just double-crossed me
next time I encounter your presence… u been hitting strike three
like this as-well...

I treat my niece like a daughter, teaching her to talk and stand
making her laugh, while my sister puts up wit’ this bitch 4 a man
haha funny shit

luckily you didn’t see my face last night, I woulda changed plans
I returned home hearing a story of how the fam twerked your ass
oo-noo here we go...

my sister left yo’ clothes in the street, you tried to get in her face
my brother got out his car, delivering fresh knuckles to your face
violence * i love it*

meanwhile I was walking on rocks with LJ, viewing the Lake (Michigan)
and the skyline, having a romantic night, and yo’ ass was dying
ok i got the picture in my mind shit getting clear..

bleeding while my sister was wailing, her fist went the flying
seems like they took it easy on you, or the story missing details
I’d throw a cocktail thru your car window in yo’ lap, try this female
oo-shit, yup now thats hot nice choise of words and creativeness

and I’ll slap your pussy ass right in the cranium with a loose brick
so keep hiding, me and my sister’s cousin coming after you bitch
you better hope it’s the last time I use my body for a fatal weapon
if U get near me, on ur neck.. my imprint’s will be permanently left

danm now thats straight anger ma danm im loving it,
this is 2005 no beef i was just playing back-then this is now good drop hella hot feeling it....

* are we cool now old beef squash?*

it's all good i don't hold nothing against you, it's all good playa... thanx for the feedback as well...

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This was an amazing read, just how you managed to put the anger and rage into it, how you pictured it inside my mind.The emotion was strongest aspect in my opinion, it's obvious you're spitting the truth here, just getting it off your chest in such an aggressive, powerful way! Imagery was real good as well, it was like watching a movie inside my mind!

Great drop here girl!

DQ

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thanx ma................. loving the support from the fam and from one of the best females on here..

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da, da da da dope... ya nice fucking drop, really liked this, good concept, structure and flow was on point, lil multies, good meta's, coovocab, everything was on point, it was a good drop, I enjoyed this more then most, i'd def. give this a 8.5/10

rtf links in sig

appreciated kid... i'll return the favor... uppin' this right chea.

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damn girl! dis was da shit!! lol ok.....structure was on point!! good emotion too it tho(well some lol) multies, vocab, ect all there.............good drop girl.....keep up da hottness...1