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~If You Ever~
Intro: I may come off as the sweetest woman in the world once you get to know me. However, I have a fighter in me. I cannot be messed with, no arrogance involved, just my dose of survival. This from an incident that happened last night, I wrote it quick just to get some anger outta me, this ain‘t no bullshit. This me damnit. ~If You Ever~ a down-ass chick, I keep my soul, mind & heart with separate keys my’s goal’s to protect the family, even if I am left less than empty once you cross a part of my blood, you just double-crossed me next time I encounter your presence… u been hitting strike three I dare you to hit my sister, bitch Iwill bust your shit wide open we roll deep & leave yo’ block fucked up with every law broken your daughter is my niece, the newest addition, youngest limb I’ll go out on a limb to protect a branch, no matter how or when I treat my niece like a daughter, teaching her to talk and stand making her laugh, while my sister puts up wit’ this bitch 4 a man luckily you didn’t see my face last night, I woulda changed plans I returned home hearing a story of how the fam twerked your ass my sister left yo’ clothes in the street, you tried to get in her face my brother got out his car, delivering fresh knuckles to your face meanwhile I was walking on rocks with LJ, viewing the Lake (Michigan) and the skyline, having a romantic night, and yo’ ass was dying bleeding while my sister was wailing, her fist went the flying seems like they took it easy on you, or the story missing details I’d throw a cocktail thru your car window in yo’ lap, try this female and I’ll slap your pussy ass right in the cranium with a loose brick so keep hiding, me and my sister’s cousin coming after you bitch you better hope it’s the last time I use my body for a fatal weapon if U get near me, on ur neck.. my imprint’s will be permanently left in -Lady Fiya April 9th |
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OMG fiya.....you got me hard....(j/p)
a down-ass chick, I keep my soul, mind & heart with separate keys
my’s goal’s to protect the family, even if I am left less than empty once you cross a part of my blood, you just double-crossed me next time I encounter your presence… u been hitting strike three ^^was feeling this...liked the strike 3 shit) I dare you to hit my sister, bitch Iwill bust your shit wide open we roll deep & leave yo’ block fucked up with every law broken ^^lol,....i gotta find me a girl thats like that...lol your daughter is my niece, the newest addition, youngest limb(kin) I’ll go out on a limb to protect a branch, no matter how or when ^^just readin that bar i thought kin instead of limb...dunno..get me? I treat my niece like a daughter, teaching her to talk and stand making her laugh, while my sister puts up wit’ this bitch 4 a man luckily you didn’t see my face last night, I woulda changed plans I returned home hearing a story of how the fam twerked your ass ^^werked ya ass???.. my sister left yo’ clothes in the street, you tried to get in her face my brother got out his car, delivering fresh knuckles to your face ^^ohhh,...lol...nice flow meanwhile I was walking on rocks with LJ, viewing the Lake (Michigan) and the skyline, having a romantic night, and yo’ ass was dying bleeding while my sister was wailing, her fist went the flying seems like they took it easy on you, or the story missing details I’d throw a cocktail thru your car window in yo’ lap, try this female ^^damn gurl...emotions stirring ..im feeling this and I’ll slap your pussy ass right in the cranium with a loose brick so keep hiding, me and my sister’s cousin coming after you bitch ^^:thumbup: you better hope it’s the last time I use my body for a fatal weapon if U get near me, on ur neck.. my imprint’s will be permanently left in ^^DAMN GURL.........i was like ya ill read a lil fiya topical... this was mothafuckin brutal honesty....damn i love fiestyness in fems . nice drop pumpkin.. :thumbup: rofl... RTF if ya'd like.........i seriously enjoyed this read...(great emotion gurl) |
Damn this was a nice peice...
i really liked it alot... You had lots of emotions in your peice... Nice imagery... good feeling , you really made the reader want to read more and more.. you had nice wordplay, good vocab , overall it was a nice peice... couldnt have expected any less from you , nice job Fam ...pz |
...thanx y'all it's greatly appreciated...........
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fiya..drop some feed on my madman drop..its short :thumbsup:
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Yo You That Gangsta We Need To Make Some Kids Then Aha Lil Gangstas & Gangstaettes But Thiss Wass A Good Piece Like The Hood Girl Type Image Feelin That So It Wass Mean And Ya Shit Wass Easy To Read.............
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the first half was decen i like how u build up ya anger as i read on, but these lines is where i started to open my eyes like wow ma is def on fire...
a down-ass chick, I keep my soul, mind & heart with separate keys my’s goal’s to protect the family, even if I am left less than empty ha nice shit here feeling it... once you cross a part of my blood, you just double-crossed me next time I encounter your presence… u been hitting strike three like this as-well... I treat my niece like a daughter, teaching her to talk and stand making her laugh, while my sister puts up wit’ this bitch 4 a man haha funny shit luckily you didn’t see my face last night, I woulda changed plans I returned home hearing a story of how the fam twerked your ass oo-noo here we go... my sister left yo’ clothes in the street, you tried to get in her face my brother got out his car, delivering fresh knuckles to your face violence * i love it* meanwhile I was walking on rocks with LJ, viewing the Lake (Michigan) and the skyline, having a romantic night, and yo’ ass was dying ok i got the picture in my mind shit getting clear.. bleeding while my sister was wailing, her fist went the flying seems like they took it easy on you, or the story missing details I’d throw a cocktail thru your car window in yo’ lap, try this female oo-shit, yup now thats hot nice choise of words and creativeness and I’ll slap your pussy ass right in the cranium with a loose brick so keep hiding, me and my sister’s cousin coming after you bitch you better hope it’s the last time I use my body for a fatal weapon if U get near me, on ur neck.. my imprint’s will be permanently left danm now thats straight anger ma danm im loving it, this is 2005 no beef i was just playing back-then this is now good drop hella hot feeling it.... * are we cool now old beef squash?* |
it's all good i don't hold nothing against you, it's all good playa... thanx for the feedback as well...
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This was an amazing read, just how you managed to put the anger and rage into it, how you pictured it inside my mind.The emotion was strongest aspect in my opinion, it's obvious you're spitting the truth here, just getting it off your chest in such an aggressive, powerful way! Imagery was real good as well, it was like watching a movie inside my mind!
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thanx ma................. loving the support from the fam and from one of the best females on here.. :thumbup:
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da, da da da dope... ya nice fucking drop, really liked this, good concept, structure and flow was on point, lil multies, good meta's, coovocab, everything was on point, it was a good drop, I enjoyed this more then most, i'd def. give this a 8.5/10
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appreciated kid... i'll return the favor... uppin' this right chea.
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damn girl! dis was da shit!! lol ok.....structure was on point!! good emotion too it tho(well some lol) multies, vocab, ect all there.............good drop girl.....keep up da hottness...1
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Damn, lol, don't get on her bad side, lol just playing, but really this was a good read, definatly some dope ish in here, all your lines were good or dope, it was consitent, and solid, I really enjoyed this, lol coo drop, ~1
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