I fell
Words have ran out like the water in wells
Love has seemed to have blown away in the winter to spring fade My head hung low looking at the dirt Just trying to shake off From that day I fell My knees aren’t scuffed There isn’t any blood My skin is tough Rough like worn leather My tears clouded together Like the springs air and rain I’ve tamed the beast and let him go A perfect balance The hands of justice Today that’s not the case I’m letting it roll down my face Wiped my eyes Un kink my neck Set my pace Take to the road With one less load No particular place to go But I’m on my way Today The day I fell in the well Covered in dirt |
dats pretty good man. but if u want sum feedbak u gotta drop two links. how about commenting on mine? angel of mine by deluzional and ill be sure to return the favor. peace
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nice man simple words but still nice and got the point across....keep it up ~1~
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DECENT it could get better or w/e but u did do it so its coo!
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its good
keep it up |
cool concept but you could have used some better vocabulary to help portray the picture you where trying to paint just keep workin and tryin new shit and youll get better
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