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- - I fell (http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=243147)

Words have ran out like the water in wells
Love has seemed to have blown away
in the winter to spring fade
My head hung low looking at the dirt
Just trying to shake off
From that day I fell

My knees aren’t scuffed
There isn’t any blood
My skin is tough
Rough like worn leather
My tears clouded together
Like the springs air and rain
I’ve tamed the beast and let him go
A perfect balance
The hands of justice
Today that’s not the case
I’m letting it roll down my face

Wiped my eyes
Un kink my neck
Set my pace
Take to the road
With one less load
No particular place to go
But I’m on my way
Today
The day I fell in the well
Covered in dirt

dats pretty good man. but if u want sum feedbak u gotta drop two links. how about commenting on mine? angel of mine by deluzional and ill be sure to return the favor. peace

DECENT it could get better or w/e but u did do it so its coo!

cool concept but you could have used some better vocabulary to help portray the picture you where trying to paint just keep workin and tryin new shit and youll get better