KizMiAzz vs Makeveli Trained
 

Battle Rules:

10 lines
house rules
hope you know what those are
g' luck

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 03-11-05 at 07:41 PM

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Makeveli Trained has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-08-05 07:42 PM.

KizMiAzz has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-08-05 07:42 PM.

i ~spit~ like its ~Rainin~ on ~makaveli~in~trainin~
slap a bitch for ~complainin~ that his ~brain~iz~strainin~
ur skilz ~containin~ aint comin out of its ~closet~
flowz wouldnt get ~feedback~ if u made a ~deposit~
da~illest heat~ u ever had waz a ~fever~
~take~a~seat~ u got no mic ur jus a ~daydream~believer~
u~an~emcee~? u cant even lay it down in ~font~4~me~
10 linez too? we belive in ~quality~not~quantaty~
i ~tear~ya~bars~ like a ~hogan~vest~
drown dat azz in ~holy~water~ ta leave u ~blessed~

aight, im writing right now, i should have it in like 30 minutes

This gay fag, prolly would like me to kiss his ass
He rhymes bad, altho shyt....
.................it's hard to read text thru trash bags
Feeding off ya rhymes, i'd need a tube of Tooth Paste
Guess u heard i Eat emcees, but im allergic ta Fruit Cakes
Seems as if im battlin Vanailla Ice's wack duplicate
Kid got mad jus cuz he didnt get into crhyme sindicate
Not even close kid, im ahead of you by far
He's like a Spring Cell Phone, cuz he barely has a Bar
I shoulda been nicer, merkin this kid was kinda wrong to do
But shyt if i wrote my lines like this.............................................. .................................................. i'd stil have a better structure than you

shyt, that 8th line is supposed to say sprint cell phone

newayz, vote it up kids

Voted For: KizMiAzz

ight this was a weak battle all around nothin really stood out but kizmiazz gets my vote cause............
his punches hit they werent hard but they hit non the less
structre was a lil good come lines were a lil stretched but they worked flow was a lil choppy but it was ight...metas were ight...not alot of wordplay...but u had some tight multis which were the reason u got my vote..................
best line-da~illest heat~ u ever had waz a ~fever~
~take~a~seat~ u got no mic ur jus a ~daydream~believer~

please returnt the favor in my battle in my sig peace

maybe i shoulda gave explanations cuz this is very sad, im guessin you just dont get any of the personals or nething then, w/e

This was feedback posted for KizMiAzz
 

lol.....................
my alias y'all :D

check the polls on this

Voted For: Makeveli Trained

vote = makeveli

mak had slightly better punchz, although they were still not great...

kiz..if those ~ are supposed to denote multis you need to work on em..cos ~fever~ doesn't multi with ~daydream~believer~. they rhyme but they don't multi...also your punchz got diluted cos you seemed to be throwin in random words for tha sake of rhymin at tha expense of meaning...something which i almost do mahself but hey..

damn, if i knew your alias before it woulda been personal city, lol
uppin

lol, im not even serious with this alias
took me 6 minutes ta write an post the verse, if i win, you are whacked out.....
:D

o so you think your funny, huh
na, but actually i was assuming you were a noob so i thought a wak verse would be enuff, maybe not tho, lol

Voted For: Makeveli Trained

well, this was blah...here what i see

makavelli....first bar was stupid, straight up, didnt rhyme, but you picked it up and had some nice personals in there, your punches were okay, some played.....fruit cake line was my fav, and your closer, those two were your best lines, you need to elevate text, no offense or anything, but it was kinda bad, although, flow wasnt bad, but structure was a little iffy at times....but you could get the hang of text easy...word

kissmyass.....dont fuckin use ~ everywhere, thats fucking gay as hell, i almost wanted to stop reading your verse....structure was okay, flow, off at times....had a few decent hits, but nothing that stood out, need to up your vocab and wordplay to make your verse more interesting, and keep your shit consistent, dont be spreading/stretching your lines too much, and dont have them too short either, and try to diss him on every line....word, elevate dog.....no hate

v/makevelli.....rtf on links in sig....and if you do, explain please...word