RV's State Of Mind
 

(This is a Journey into the mind of three different types of people on RV...lol, kinda like that track school by Apathy.... 1. Noob 2. Apathetic Vet 3. Addicted Vet)

A fresh face i came to battle and show the hottest of rhymes
So I am liable to post a verse in any random topic I find
If you try to criticize me then the beef will likely spark
And I'll be in every thread thinkin its cool to type like I talk
Now some faggot calls me out sayin that he'll leave me slayed
So i spit my illest verse, but ya'll think my shit is played
Then i check 5 hours later and i flip explode and i rave
Cuz i was expectin to get at least 10 votes in a day
Maybe i need exposure so i start thought provoking threads for respect
Hip hop lounge...New topic...Hmm, how bout Eminem Vs. 50 Cent
And if any of you vets try to clown then you can expect
That I'll reply with one of them typical E-threats
Theres no way I'll come with something clever or say something witty
It's most likely under 10 words..."I dare you to come to my city"
And I'll overuse that gun smiley cuz i think that shits cool
Later on today ima try and get into like six crews
I imitate the radio and claim to really pimp and bust tecks
Here i imitate vets, I might even start ending MY posts with "nuff said"
Dont know how to describe myself, Im not a head or a groupie
But yall seem to have it figured out...you say im ya regular newbie


Me? I guess Im best described as apathetic
To tell you the truth i dont think i even have a rep kid
I just come on the board when I'm bored its used to kill time
And i dont take my work serious its just a hobby to spill rhymes
I got no enemies cuz really its too much effort to beef
And I dont claim gangsterism or even hint that im messin with heat
Wont know you by another name dont see the point in an alias
Especially when i dont even care enough to put a name on my mailing list
Truthfully I dont know if your newb or the site you love and need
Except for the ways you act...described in verses one and three
Its called a community..HA HA...whats so funny is
Not a single on of you cats are on my buddy list
This is a fucking website and i treat it as is
Not like I depend on this like i need it to live
Dont front and try to act like i hate addicts and newbs
Cuz theres a couple people like this that i have in my crew
And they recruited me so dont even think im a hypocrite
Cuz a statement like that would officially make you ignorant
I dont stay online and never once have i claimed to play with nines
But i AM the first member able to bring you RVs state of mind


You better recognize, I believe im the illest emcee
Im on 24/7 cuz post count is everything to me
To be cool i get an alias name and let some know about it
While trying to clown on everyone with a post count under a thousand
I think theres a little talent on here, but i got the most
And to fit in with you all I'll say "werd" after every post
I got 5,000 of em with 2 battles so its about time i write a rhyme
Cuz with this many posts no one would believe id bite a line
And it dont even cross my mind to lose all my hopeless fans
Cuz their all dick riders and will make sure that i dont get banned
I have to go apply to every single crew tonight
And feel accepted cuz without the site i might commit suicide
Because lets be real, who else would i tell my life to
About my fights with my parents or by my girl i was lied to
And how i might get a deal, if i say it, it might come true
So i start to gloat a lot and clown on everything you do
And it seems that you hate me, I think you may be plottin
So slowly but surely my posts you stop spottin
I've had way too much fun trying to play this crude game
So i hit the reset button, its time to make a new name


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First verse- ROFL. Good job. The flow was super duper dope. You pulled it off realllly nicely.

Second verse- It was not contradictory to the first verse but definately clashing in terms of tone, a lot. But I see what you're saying. Flow was good still but not AS good.

Third verse- Again, too real. It wasn't funny though :( Flow was cool and everything.


Okay, even though I feel you might have taken a fair share of shots at me, :(, it was a pretty cool piece. Personally, I feel the middle verse was clashing too much with the others and should be taken out and extended into a whole different OM. But otherwise, good job :)

7.9/10

thanks for the feedback


maybe i shoulda labeled the verses as being three different types of people on RV

this is hott.....7.5/10
check out mine stay elevatin playa

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hmm decent the stucture was ight coulda been better the imagery was alright kinda feeling it but it didnt work out sometimes the words didnt make sense or just dint fit in that line at all but other den that i twas decent the vocab wasnt to great the emotion was nice and thats all there is to a topical really you kinda told a story but not really at the same time but it was just one of them kinda self explanitory dropes ya knah..

rtf on my OM's check the crew forum for links

I liked this flow you had going. It was tight cuz I was putting a beat to my head and you was hittin' it on key and everything with ya words.

haha, funny, cause some of that shit could apply to me....i like how you depicted each one, so many people i know and from rv were just poppin into my head fillin those roles, haha ,good job.....just work on structure and flow, get that capped off, and try to be consistent with the tone of writing, like, you dont wanna be really funny, then get all serious, nah mean, but solid peace

good work u got a real funny vibe 2 diz but it has an overall quality 8.0/10 & talkin bout dez rv folks is creative keep up the good work

hmmmmmmm, i wonder who that wuz 2...

but yeah, not bad mayn, u described alot of ppl on here, lol, it wuz funny 2, WERD

lol..i wasnt thinkin of u specific....but i remember a thread where like 10 people ended their posts with "werd"...cool if your the first...gay if your a follower

i doubt i wuz tha 1st, but i sed that shit b4 i even had a computer, so i just sed it on websytes 2, lol. everyone else iz just a KOOL COL-B wannabe, werd

downing....sorta long but worth it

that shit was dope, was a nice long write... mentioned ya might get a deal, thats hot... i need a collab so be sure to hit me up any time for one... i liked the imagery and the consistant flow. you used an extensive decent and low key vocaubulary, the list goes on, you have great imagination, fiction or non fiction the story was felt, i invisioned this being audio'ed... you should see whats up with that, grab a hook and some heads... jot down a chorus and box it. record a track or two.. have it real southern, cause the west got to ill to be underground with, your fire though, like i said.... get at me for a collab, i got some topics just marinating. word.

nicely done, pc.