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Young Kidd (LM) 06-07-06 05:59 AM

Back To Text..
 
Feed 1
Feed 2

Whoa..Flashbacks..

*Pulls Out A Pen...Turns On Beanie Sigel - Feel It In The Air Instrumental*

Key-Status

Damn, A Pen As My Weapon I Pick My Brain Clean, Crazy Thoughts Insane Dreams,
Every Time I Speak, I Teach My Self a Lesson And Realize What I Claim to Be,
An Emcee, Rapper, Lyricists Is What I Say But Can't Feel The Shit,
Make Myself Believe it Or Try To With So Many Tricks,
But What The Reality Really Is,
Until I Elevate I Realize My Eyes Won't Open When I Denouce The Fake,
And Claim My Fate, I'll Become a Dream So I Scheme To Announce Today,
That This Game Is Stupid, Beef Between Nuisances Claimin They The Best,
Losers Stating And Saying They Will Put The Banger To Your Chest,
Disrespecting And Placin Labels And Names upon the Vets,
Just Because They Lost a Fucking Game On The Net...

*Switchs Instrumental, Kanye West - Thru The Wire*

Now To Address The Return Of A Legend
Who Was Destined To Make a Return To The Textin,
People Talk Tellin Me Your Skill Has Lessened,
But When It Comes Down to It, Im Not Who They Bested,
Or Better Than, Never Claimed To Be A Veteran
Or Ever Test The Relevance,
Of Needing The Title, It's Evident, No Matter What,
You Can Lose And Still Claim To Be The Best Of Man,
Switchin The Styles, Getting All Wild Preachin Like a Reverand,
Cuz Im Just Tryna Teach Ya'll A Lesson Man...

*Switches Instrumental, Papoose - Ridin Shotgun*
Lyricists?...Speed It Up...

Ambidextrous I Write With Both Hands, No Fame, But A Known Man,
No Fam, Just A Sick Syphillis Rapper With A Flow That Grows Like Rogain,
Running From The Po Man?, Nah, But You Better Be Holding,
Sense?, A Common Name Gained Then Proclaimed, By Not Dealin Cocaine,
Get It, Get With It...Back to The Lyrics...
Absolutely Absorb Bastards By Causing Cataclysmic Disasters,
Back Up Fore We Blast Ya With UV Rays That Turn Bitchs To Ashes,
What You Packing?, Flow That Does Flips And Causes kids To Do Acrobatics,
Hope you Know Gymnastics, Just to Catch A flow That Goes A little Faster...

Damn im bored..up..loll...

Critic 06-07-06 07:23 AM

I like the final part of the verse this was dope,.. had some nice inners,..
flow was sick, good drop Sense.

Stay up

1~

Young Kidd (LM) 06-07-06 08:56 AM

thanks..this is my first text drop in a while..so i appreciate the feed man..

Young Kidd (LM) 06-08-06 03:16 AM

Anyone..out htere..lol drop a link and ill rtf..

AkHiLeEz_SkYLL 06-08-06 07:13 PM

aight, this was good.

Disrespecting And Placin Labels And Names upon the Vets,
Just Because They Lost a Fucking Game On The Net...
^^^^Hot and True.

Now To Address The Return Of A Legend
Who Was Destined To Make a Return To The Textin,
People Talk Tellin Me Your Skill Has Lessened,
But When It Comes Down to It, Im Not Who They Bested,
Or Better Than, Never Claimed To Be A Veteran
Or Ever Test The Relevance,
^^^^this was hot, but i've never heard of "bested" so forced rhyming didn't grab me.

Absolutely Absorb Bastards By Causing Cataclysmic Disasters,
^^^^Dope Alliteration.

Back Up Fore We Blast Ya With UV Rays That Turn Bitchs To Ashes,
What You Packing?, Flow That Does Flips And Causes kids To Do Acrobatics,
Hope you Know Gymnastics,
^^^^ this was fire, period.

flow - i haven't heard 2/3 beats, so i was iffy reading the verses, but i'm sure it flowed alright.
multis - you had'em, none really eye-catching.
structure - clean, real nice.
vocab - dope.
metas/similes - had some simple ones that made sense. better some then none.
concept - returning to teach, hot.
overall - 8/10

-A. SkyLL

Young Kidd (LM) 06-08-06 07:15 PM

the bested one...i dont know..lol it was like...

If you've bested someone...you've done better than the best they could..

you had me checkin to see if it was a real word..but yea it is..

dictionary.com

tr.v. best·ed, best·ing, bests
To get the better of; beat: “I'm a rough customer, I expect, but I know when I'm bested” (Nathanael West).

thanks for the feed man..no doubt..

AkHiLeEz_SkYLL 06-08-06 08:17 PM

ahhh....aight. i guess it wasn't forced, good shit fam.

Young Kidd (LM) 06-08-06 08:24 PM

lol its cool..didnt want to seem like an ass when i posted the explanation..lol but you got me wondering if it was even a word..i was sure it was though..lol

AkHiLeEz_SkYLL 06-09-06 11:00 PM

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=228869
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=229660
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=228677
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=228023
^^^^
few of my drops, it'd be appreciated if you could drop feed like i did on at least one of my pieces. - A. Skyll.

Young Kidd (LM) 06-09-06 11:12 PM

i will when i get back later tonight..im going somewhere right now..but bet ill hit em up..

XpLiCiT187 06-09-06 11:24 PM

This Shit Was Nice, Just Kept Gettin Better As It Went Along. First Part To The Beanz Instrumental Aint Seem Like It Was Flowin Right But I Trust I'd Prolly Just Have To Hear It. The Last Part Was Dope As Fuck, 8/10 On Dat Verse... The Piece As A Whole I'd Give A 7/10, Some Forced Rhymes In The First 2 Verses Hurt The Rest Of It... But Overall Shit Was Mad Hot.

AkHiLeEz_SkYLL 06-14-06 07:29 PM

Quote:
Originally Posted by AkHiLeEz_SkYLL

^^^^^^^^ get at me don

ElitE LyrIcIsT 06-18-06 11:27 AM

this was a good piece
i read all the parts wit the beat and u were on flow
had some nice lines

Uno 07-12-06 03:15 PM

Dis shit was dope. It kept getting better everytime. The flow was nice. Keep doing ya thing ~1~


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