Dream Life
Wake up at dawn n' breath deep, take in the morning
Fire's cracklin' from the eggs my woman's warming she loves me, n' shes somebody i've known so long Long hair, pretty face.. n' lookin' cute with a kimono on I get up slow, put on my robe while I puff 'dro Loose clothes underneath, cotton belt's tightened up though Gotta bit of a red nose, been sippin' sake here and there Sit and eat my breakfast while wifey does my hair Now, I gotta figure out where im gonna go to chill Fireflies on the lake? maybe my pagoda on the hill? bamboo forest? nah, I'm in the mood for something quicker.. Maybe catchin' carp for dinner in the crystal blue river. I get rockin, so fit I ain't tired so im never stoppin' pass the bridge and the petals droppin from the cherry blossoms Get there but im hungry n' its a little too past noon for brunch Guess i'll sit in a tree and eat some fresh fruit for lunch nice snack for a dude to munch, but now lets do this Hop into the river n' watch the fishes movements Gotta stay damn still, make it so they feel natural Go with the flow of the water... Keep tranquil. The moment comes, quick as a flash, dash, catch a carp throw it onto dry land, but thats just the start No doubt, this acts an art that took time to aquire Caught ten fish, now it's about time to retire. Look up at the sky... Yeah, it's dusk. Walking along the coastline home's a must Strolling along the cliffs with my sack of fish I love doin' this... I'll tell you what magic is? It's seeing the sky lit up, then lookin' below, and seeing sun go down n' make the sea glow Home to my wife now its time to eat, finally... Every night I think: Damn, what a perfect life I lead. |
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And when did i say i was going to do your hair....lmao jp....nice flow....went real well together....flow was amazing....ah i really liked it....i didnt see anything wrong wif it so....keep up da good work boo....1
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Thanks for the feedback :)
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ok i wanna say thanks for leaving feed on my piece so im returning the favor. and let me say im glad i did. this was a really nice piece. had great imagery. creativity. and flow. structure was good. and just wanna say this was really nice. in total i liked the 2nd part the best. was really good. but at the begining i was thrown off when u said u chik was doing ur hair. i thought u was a thug and smokin the dro' but then i realized u pure chinese shit. lol dunno wut u are but wutever really nice and keep up the good work homeboy. holla for a collab.
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Im caucasian -_-
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Yo Tera, Long time man!
Nice shit bro... haven't read anything from you in ages man this was nice and refreshing, chilled vibe man i like your laid back style. I can see how you've pretty much got a writing style down pat, you seem really comfortable and elevated from a lot of the others here man. I think the difference is that your a 'real' emcee. It's about fuckn time for a dopium collab with You, Nos and me, dont u think. would be fuckn dope. T it up. Dont b a stranger |
ya braw i liked this piece really got me hooked i don't know what it was though but i liked it keep up the good work and elevate a little mad potential hey if you can take a looke at true feelings of a loving man
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good structure made for nice flow and a good read. i think it's nice to finally see some pieces on here that don't always end in tragedy or use the word 'soul' in it. i liked it, lacked some originality but it was a nice read throughout..
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=227884 |
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I've posted pics though.
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Lol flow is nice and easy to read, multi's were pretty good...overall i really like this piece because its good balance..lol has the slighttest emotion and i really like it... all i gotta say is you can still improve on the flow even though it was damn near perfect here, plus a little more Complexity in General and it will be perfect..but for what it is, and in my opinion on what you wanted it to be (which i dont know for shure) but its good...lol..
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damn. that was dope. i fuckin saw everything you said omb. i miss topicals. hehe. i used to be semi-dope at em ;).
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Man wtf... you are ill, but pretty dissapeared lmao.
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