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The Hunted ft Paranoid
Legend Sinnister Paranoid They could not silence our tounges with their malicious lies, Their unforgotten violence, remember those who died. My mortality left behind,strength arise, my entity freed. Cries of life, forsaken by god, I wander aimlessly. I beseech you all, my calling for the fate of all, believe. Take me away my soul was caged, now released Walking over the abyss with angels by my side Although there's nothing else to see, I'm blind.. My voice lost, a hostile brain generated Kept in one, failin to reign the frustrated A ghosts trigger, justice was provoked This lost soul spoke, hopeless and a joke Fragmented people, scared to be equal Always lonesome, but faired to be lethal Hesitation was provin, situated at dawn The wolfs moon, fearing the cats yawn Impossible to be defeated, easily won Rank extortions explode, carrying a lone My kingdom functions, ly all this desperation Unable to conceive, thy twist separation hookx2: The names of the dead whispered in tongues Voices lie still, songs left unsung Bury these words in ashes and blood Here lie the worlds of dreamers decayed and unloved In this world of the desperate and lost cast in filth Compassion condemned in this nightmare fulfilled Born and enslaved to this modern age Where blood stains each step of this path we have paved What price for our reign, what cost for their fate, In this night un-ending when dawn comes too late For each life that's stolen and each cry unheard For our lust that's written in scars on this Earth The lies which they teach with forked tongues they speak Of this world created to conquer, to rule their greed....... hookx2: The names of the dead whispered in tongues Voices lie still, songs left unsung Bury these words in ashes and blood Here lie the worlds of dreamers decayed and unloved |
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Damn this was actually pretty good, I liked the hook, nice touch.
Paranoid: Your flow was great, structure on par. The shortness of your lines just made it stand out all the more. I like your choice of language. All in all, nice job bro. Sin: Damn man, nice job on the hook (i'm sure it wasnt TOO hard to come up with, but it went along good) Your structure wasnt as good as Par's, but it didnt seem to hinder your flow much at all. I liked the vocab tyou used, not overdone, just enough. You both seemed to get your points accross well enough, keep it up! 7/10 RTF in the link on my sig, peace. |
Hurry up and drop some links so bonehead doesnt lock ur' shit :p
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^^^^^^^^^^Thanks For the warning man..............
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lol, no prob man
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nice stuff but lines too short flow was ok you could've easily rhymed it more structure somewhat like mine
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my facts never phony they please and has taste like macaroni and cheese hit targets with guns and get market funds like investers, account blank need amounts in banks like
Bill Gates have ill fate on computers be boss everywhere with software |
^wtf
anyway thanks for the feed Mentalz. uppin http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2454430 |
shaft 26 , please don't free post in my open mics
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good stuff i also liked the hook need a little bit of help on structere
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props to both of u sinnister u came hot on this good flow and the 2nd best flow ive seen from a dope topical head
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^^^^^^Thanks, For the feedback.,..................
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thanks willa, ill check some of your shit out.....
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