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deuce deuce 12-25-03 01:57 PM

quick keystyle
 
replies:
russies
buzzkill
austrailsumthing??? i forget

sharpe like an edge, and blunt enough to cut flesh:
get killed w/ words that been said, and left a mess:
a verbal clash, when i wip ass, on gayass dick riders:
continue, to pursue, to tear, mc's bear, w/ my insisors:
got the power, to have u devoured, an leave u mangled:
spit words like cum, an quick to leave ur cerebrum, tangled:
one man u can't handle, w/ bare hands i'll have u strangled:
i got the intagables, to do more than compete, in the game:
like canables, i'll eat, mc's and newbies to put'em to shame:


flows off but its just a quicky

Center Sight 12-25-03 02:19 PM

good shit man, feelin ur flow.. some kool wordplay u have a nice style, stick wit it keep spittin, holla

rule 12-25-03 03:14 PM

not bad, short and sweet, not very complex, some alright lines nothing stood out to me but keep uppen your creativity and wordplay your flow was on point but your vocab was somewhat weak, I think you could of had more into this but good for a start keep uppen

Fl~O~mEtRy 12-25-03 03:28 PM

not bad man, keep it up, yah very simpol;e n realistic in the perfect sense

Menik 12-25-03 05:03 PM

Man your feedbacks are shit...leave better feedback on 3 other open mics and PM me the links and i will re-open this but for now this is Closed.

Quote:
my replies are.....

hovaman - gangsterlife

pr3cise- past his time

requim- quicky freestyle




ok u can open my thread now


re-opened..Make sure you leave better feedback next time.

deuce deuce 12-28-03 11:02 PM

upp'n my shit....

Straight Ace 12-28-03 11:05 PM

Keep tryin'..
In a positive way..
This wasn't bad, decent tho to short.
Real constructive feedback N/A..

deuce deuce 12-29-03 03:50 PM

thanx for the crit man

Penskills 12-29-03 03:53 PM

..Short and nice..your wordplay was nice..your flow was there..looking forward to the extended version..

Fredrick 12-29-03 04:03 PM

nice shit

NewPort 12-29-03 04:20 PM

this had sum good flow to it.. another short piece
but good flow none the less.. the content was ight.
for a quick keystyle n' all.. would like to see more
n' longer pieces.. shit you actually try on

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deuce deuce 12-29-03 07:35 PM

ttt

A-DueCe-26mad3 12-29-03 07:57 PM

nice spit, not really too long but it was to the point. Had a nice flow to it. The bar structure and rhyme scheme were prety good 2. Overall a good keystyle, but it would prob be better if it was longer.

~1~

A77iCuS 12-29-03 09:58 PM

the flow was pretty tite and u had sum good vocab but it was realy simple maybe crank it up with some multis or something

Echo 12-29-03 11:18 PM

Pretty cool, kind of like a nighttime pickup. Don't ask. Cute little keystyle. Everything was good. Work on structure.


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