A Story Of A Girl. . .
She's Walking Around, Head Down, Talking To The Ground
Everything To Be Fine, She's Wanting That Now All Those Spots On Her Body, She Ain't Flauntin' Um Proud But The Bullies Noticed N Are Tauntin' Her Loud It's Not Her Fault Her Daddy Has A Drinking Issue Instead Of Hitting The Books, She Gotta Think With Tissues Letters Of I Miss You. . To Her Deceased Mother Release From This Struggle She Wants This But She Can't Tell Another Reason Being, Her Dad Has Proclaimed Sabotage Black Mail, So Now Her Hopes Are A Mere Mirage Lips Shut, Tits Fucked, She Don't Wanna Be Dead She Got Sexual Abuse And The Other Bullshit On Her Head Dad Says She's Stupid, But She Has Knowledge But That's Wasted, Money Spent On Beer, No Cash For College She Needs To Get Away, She Prays For A Better Tomorrow She Wants A Good Life Borrowed. . In Exchange For Her Sorrow [Chorus] Her Life Is Complicated, She Doubts She'll Make It How Much Longer Can She Take This ? She's Ready To Break Shit Dad Lingers, Drunk As Fuck, Tryna Will Her To The Bedroom She's Dying Inside And Actually Hopin To Be Dead Soon "Get In This Bed You Fucking Slut, Daddy's Gotta Go Soon While You're On Your Way, Spray Some Of That Perfume" She Deals With This, Everyday, She Hates The Incest But It's Sex Unless, She Wants That Promised Bullet In Her Chest She Has No Friends To Run To, She's Always Been Secluded Her Appearance's Polluted, Each Day She's More Diluted "What Are You Fucking Scared ? Ain't Like Daddy Will Harm You Doesn't Daddy Charm You ? Be A Freak Baby, I Know How The Calm Do" She Cringed At These Words, Didn't Do What She Was Told He Struck Her, Then Fucked Her, Now It's Her Own Blood She Holds Her Eyes Red, She's Crying, Trying To Figure Out Why But She Cleans Up, Continues In Strides While Keeping Shit Inside Outside, She Always To Her Self, Wonderin' If Anyone Has Felt Or Dealt With What She Has, Her Thoughts Erased By A Belt Cracking Against Wood, Her Dad's Home From Work, Beer In Hand Next Day, She's Sobbing, But Someone Says "Why Those Tears Ma'dam?" [Chorus] Her Life Is Complicated, She Doubts She'll Make It How Much Longer Can She Take This ? She's Ready To Break Shit Dad Lingers, Drunk As Fuck, Tryna Will Her To The Bedroom She's Dying Inside And Actually Hopin To Be Dead Soon She Finally Felt Air Breathed Into Her Life, The Sight A Young Man Her Age, Wanting To Take Her Out That Night Said She Was Beautiful, And For The First Time In Months. . . . She Smiled It Was Illuminating And She Forgot The Hatred For A While She Went Home, Quickly Dressed N Crept Out The Door She Almost Laughed, While Sneakin Out N Hearin Her Dad Snore The Man Picked Her Up, They Went Out And Had A Good Time She Dreaded Going Home, Begged To Not Leave Her Alone Under The Moonshine He Said He Had To, But Would See Her Tomorrow, Then Kissed Her Not Knowing He'd Miss Her N She'd Be Gone From The Physical Picture She Approached Her House, Smelt The Liquar, She Tried To Creep In But Her Dad Tripped Her, Hit Her, Yelling "Where Have You Been?" She Screamed, Blood Curdling, For Him To Get Off Her Please He Struck Her Again, Then Told Her To Bend, Next Is Knees But Midway Through The Humiliation, He Stopped, Lost His Patientence He Smelled Cologne From The Young Man. . . . Proceeded To Beat Her N Toss Her Down The Stairs Of The Basement Loaded The Gun, Told Her Not Say Shit As He Made This Statement "I Loved You, I Swear I Loved You, And That's Why I Fucked You You Mean So Much To Me, That's Why I Always Touched You But You Didn't Have To Cheat Like Your Mother Did, Damnit Where's My Drink ? Fuck It, I Made A Promise Now You Can Have It" Gunshot Such A Smart Lady, Didn't Live To Full Potential All Because Of A Drunk Dad And Pistol, Girl I Miss You Your Dad Got Dealt With, Don't Worry Anymore, He Won't Hit You I'll Be Up There Soon, For Our Second Date To Get You. . This A Real Issue. . Take Notice. . If You See Someone Down. . Pick Um Up. . See What's Going On. . Cause You Don't Know What They're Going Through. . Save Them. . Before It's Too Late. . This Was The Story Of A Girl. . |
nice Man i always Enjoyed Your Pieces...this one was really Good i enjoyed your Flow Which is always Good...ya Have Nice Structure And Good vocab in this And One Of Ya best i think...so all and all i'd say this was a decent Piece..ya reallly used the topic Well ya Didnt Really Play It Out....PeacE....
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Appreciate That. .
Lemme Mention. . The Idea Of Sexual Exchanges Between A Daughter And Father Was Partly Inspired By Salvation's Pretty Girl, Wrong Love Track. . I've Always Wanted To Touch On The Topic Of Controlling And Abusive Fathers Towards Their Children. . And Salvation's Track Reminded Me. . So I Wrote This In About 30 Minutes. . So Thanks To Sal-V For Inspiring Some Of This. . Pz. |
yo man some good shit, nice to see u back again and in the game bro. but anyways your flow was good and some extremely good content in here, vocab and wordplay was dope to and it's good to see someone touch up on this topic. nice drop bro keep it up. peace.
yo man peep mine and Yaz's collab called "Stories of Old ft. Yaz" it should be near the top and leave some feedback plz and thank you. keep up bro. |
thought this was a good concept and ya got it off in a good light... for the length you kept the interest in well and kept to the topic...... the flow was pretty consistent thru it, but some of the lines, the speach seemed to be put there cos it fits, som of them could have been re-worded to get the point across..... but pretty good drop...
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I liked dis piece nice story
nice flow and vocab keep dropping 8.5/10 |
Come up with original shit .. for once.
and by the way .. Sal-v's piece was yours x 10 .. you didn't have anything interesting .. amazing twists, outstanding structure .. ehh |
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