Inside my head
 

I remember the things that brought me down
but now things are startin to come around
my life has put me through hell, but now thats over
everything's lookin good, like i picked up a 4 leaf clover
all those times i cried, but now luck's on my side
being truthful to all my friends that is what i tried

things are lookin good, or is it just a trick
i don't really know, but i really like this chick
i know she likes me, and i know i like her too
sorry to my ex, all those things i put you through
i know this is strange, i'm not really being myself
but i put my anger away, and stored on my shelf

but ya all never know, it could simply come back
whatever comes to mind, i could rip shit and attack
but i'll try to keep it all hidden locked and concealed
never want all but pieces of the truth revealed
things that go on inside my head it can be confusing
but yet, i still find it all to be quite fucking amusing

just a quick keystyle, i dunno might make sense, might not
but it's all good right
uppin for feedback

peace

uppin for feedback

This was a good piece...some basic lines...but all the emotion was good because a lot of people may feel like this...but you flipped the end..that was cool i'd try to get more imagry...and some more detail from metphores...but good drop keep it up

I read it, curious of what your content would be.....
I did feel EMOTION and that is MAIN THING to me, be it freestyle, (keystyle) , Poetry, songs, etc
Emotion is what ties other to the song
So that is my strong point :
I was able to feel it !! Captured the moment
Structure was DOPE

Multies were kinda basic, (but this isn't a battle) so don't matter as much as EMOTION

Vocab was kinda basic too

Overall I liked and I will rec. a read to someone

As ALWAYS Keep Elevating

JamesJr.

thanks
uppin