da mc murderer
 

i kill mcs till they disapear/
i hate to be dissin my peers/
ill hit you wit an 8+1 but i aint doin no arithmetic/
fuck wit me and your wrist get split/
ill break you up like long division/
i got no time for bitchin/
ill still be the hardest rapper even if i had limp dick/
i ripp scripts/
demolish come up to yo face wit 6 clips/
if i eat ILL then i guess i pop out wit sick shit/
im a have a bullet leave through the other side of your head/
in 8 seconds youll be dead/
no vest can protect you/
im a lyrically disect you/
i will physically digest you/
make you resign early like nixon/
messin wit me, your life is what your riskin/
a knife will strike your abdomen/
kill you and half your men/
lyrically im the best/
ill send slugs through your chest/
ill leave the best vets wit red vest/

well this is ok....id like to see you be more origional, and better structure, just a little FYI, you might wanna click the link that says, FRONT LINES, and the BITCH SLAPPED to get into a battle, the open mic is for free spirted peices, wanna get stature, go battle, ooo btw for someone who kills Mc's your records still 0-0??

gimme some feedback

This was alright...more of a battle verse or a self promotion piece....but you had some decent lines in there....structure could be fixed up like MATCHyou said, try to even the lines up a bit so it doesnt throw the flow off....but keep at it.