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02-23-04, 11:35 PM | #1 | ||||
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da mc murderer
IP: 3E94 B418
i kill mcs till they disapear/
i hate to be dissin my peers/ ill hit you wit an 8+1 but i aint doin no arithmetic/ fuck wit me and your wrist get split/ ill break you up like long division/ i got no time for bitchin/ ill still be the hardest rapper even if i had limp dick/ i ripp scripts/ demolish come up to yo face wit 6 clips/ if i eat ILL then i guess i pop out wit sick shit/ im a have a bullet leave through the other side of your head/ in 8 seconds youll be dead/ no vest can protect you/ im a lyrically disect you/ i will physically digest you/ make you resign early like nixon/ messin wit me, your life is what your riskin/ a knife will strike your abdomen/ kill you and half your men/ lyrically im the best/ ill send slugs through your chest/ ill leave the best vets wit red vest/ |
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02-24-04, 07:31 AM | #2 | |||||||
Flyweight
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IP: 0612 539A
well this is ok....id like to see you be more origional, and better structure, just a little FYI, you might wanna click the link that says, FRONT LINES, and the BITCH SLAPPED to get into a battle, the open mic is for free spirted peices, wanna get stature, go battle, ooo btw for someone who kills Mc's your records still 0-0??
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MATCH.........GOT U Vote @ http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=114041 you new to RB, man bet you get dissed alot// if you was a child molest youd still get dick alot// what is you confused cant member which team you be with// i know you shirts old navy but your mouths on seamen// |
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03-05-04, 07:57 PM | #3 | ||||
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IP: 75CE A0E1
gimme some feedback
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03-08-04, 09:26 AM | #4 | ||||
Word.
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IP: 340D 8B8F
This was alright...more of a battle verse or a self promotion piece....but you had some decent lines in there....structure could be fixed up like MATCHyou said, try to even the lines up a bit so it doesnt throw the flow off....but keep at it.
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