first ever keystyle
 

it's gremlin, im terrorizing and analyizing
no room for nerds and their starship enterprising
this for the real emcees
the one's that be demolishing niggas, leaving debris
rhymes come naturally on the keyboard
any nigga wanna battle me, i suggest u take a detour
cause you'll hit a dead end, with no where to go
ill rip u apart, make ur rhymes seem like they written for bel biv devoe
i be the extreme case of fire and anger
every rhyme i spit is like sly stallone, a cliffhanger
king gremlin bout to hit ur metropolis
im so deadly, ill make 50 look like george popadapolis.

let me know what u guys think. :evilgrin:

pretty primitive, kinda basic man

Im not one to just say bad things but that "rhymes come naturally on the keyboard
any nigga wanna battle me, i suggest u take a detour" nice line liked that

but really you wanna keep it more structured so the syllables are close...loook how your rhyme is, its med...then long....then short, keep it closer thats all i can think of...

word. ill work on that

shit was hot boy that punch right there was kind of sick widd it anyway keep your wordplay in there and multis and metas it was kinda basic tho you prolly could of came harder

i like that cliffhanger ryme dog, and all the flow was tight.