first open mic so be nice and honest
 

MA FRIEND

ma best friend died i feel no pain
i don't kno if i'll go crazy,if i wil go insane
i don't understand no crying no tears
even tho this event fufilled ma worst fears
i have no idea y life has treated me this way
i don't kno to live or die goin on from this day
i am not a soldier who wuz built to have no feelings
i feel closed up inside like a steel house wit steel ceilings
i don't kno if this is tha way i spose to feel
i mean sad but happy like a jus signed a deal
i spose i don't feel quite sure of maself
i wonder if ur dad died how u wud have felt


gimme real replies

is that a true story?????????????????????????????????????????

aye Young was that supposed t be a freestyle or poetry. because if it was a freestyle you shouldve picked a dfferent topic. but it was hot as hell if it was poetry. Just work on ya grammer and ya structure

yo I feel you dog if that was a true story

not tru..don't kno if fuckin poetry or freestyle..lol..jus wrote..sorry if not freestyle...

I felt that.
Keep rhymin nigga.

Pretty good. Could've been freestyle or poetry. Very deep stuff, though it wasn't true. This topic isn't really something to judge, so i'm just going to say it was iight. Flow was a little off, besides that its ok.

uhmm it was real....ummm....well..it was just real. Keep writing and El a vayte!


Chyea!!!!!!!!!!!!1


Holla!!!!!!

that was chill, keep rappin
**dj dArK

Nice shit dude. Coulda used a little more flow, but I liked it alot.

Sorry for ya too. Shit happens =/

Keep droppin' bro.

0-Sum

annoucement i'm a gurl..lol..its coo zerosum...oh AND REP NC ma nicca

Nice start. Nice Topic. Yeah, could have made it more "Freestyle" oriented. I like the topic... Its no cool to post a battle rap...
Cmon girl. Run the shit through Microsoft word...It looks herbish with spelling mistakes and punctuation errors!

that shit waz tite ssome deep ass shit shoulda kept goin an made it longer though

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