Life Is Unfair- HOTT SHIT Everybody Peep
 

hook- life is unfair but u play da hand dat u dealt/
some niggas wont make it its every man for himself/
crooked eyes scheme to get they hands on da wealth/
so be careful who u trust or you'll be laughin at death/

life's unfair but ima play it like a hand of spades/
my plans is made/ to blow up like a hand grenade/
i stand alone in deez streets, yup, a renegade/
wit da crome in da seat, cuz, they wanna end my dayz/
watchin my back on da land, but, neva been afraid/
cuz while dey tryna get at me dawg they menz get sprayed/
like a can of raid, i drop a bomb on deez roaches/
take a look up in my face see im young but im focused/
tryna make it out alive keep da guns out the holster/
and da fake say they gone ride but cant stomach the coaster/
and they tryna get closer, but no way/
cuz soon as they get locked up they go state/
lil nigga go play, if u cant hold me down/
no hoes around/ we blow da pound/
u on dat spot where dem vulture's found/
i tote da glock and controll da town/
and got yay from snow white to golden brown/

uppin for some feedback im always droppin feedback so stop sleepin

this drop is a very truthful piece u could have been more creative with the rhyme scheme but you still had a nice little scheme to go by on this..very true shit stated in ya rhymes espcially the chorus..which opened up the door for the verse to expectedly be ill nice job

shit was nice i felt it keep doin yo thang homie check out my newest shit venomous spit wit country or my new freewrite thanx holla back n keep postin peace

Thats a pretty hot rhyme dawg, nice flow with good content. uppin for another verse.

:slick: Yo I'm Feelin Yo shit cuz. Keep doin tha damn Thing! Hallor


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that was hot man, feeling that. i agree, you could have been a bit more creative with imagery and wordplay and stuff, but the hook especially was real nice. keep doing ya thing and check my song when you got the time!

thanx for da feedback uppin dis shit