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Old 07-26-04, 07:55 PM   #1
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Life Is Unfair- HOTT SHIT Everybody Peep

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hook- life is unfair but u play da hand dat u dealt/
some niggas wont make it its every man for himself/
crooked eyes scheme to get they hands on da wealth/
so be careful who u trust or you'll be laughin at death/

life's unfair but ima play it like a hand of spades/
my plans is made/ to blow up like a hand grenade/
i stand alone in deez streets, yup, a renegade/
wit da crome in da seat, cuz, they wanna end my dayz/
watchin my back on da land, but, neva been afraid/
cuz while dey tryna get at me dawg they menz get sprayed/
like a can of raid, i drop a bomb on deez roaches/
take a look up in my face see im young but im focused/
tryna make it out alive keep da guns out the holster/
and da fake say they gone ride but cant stomach the coaster/
and they tryna get closer, but no way/
cuz soon as they get locked up they go state/
lil nigga go play, if u cant hold me down/
no hoes around/ we blow da pound/
u on dat spot where dem vulture's found/
i tote da glock and controll da town/
and got yay from snow white to golden brown/
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Old 07-27-04, 08:27 AM   #2
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uppin for some feedback im always droppin feedback so stop sleepin
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Old 07-27-04, 09:08 AM   #3
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this drop is a very truthful piece u could have been more creative with the rhyme scheme but you still had a nice little scheme to go by on this..very true shit stated in ya rhymes espcially the chorus..which opened up the door for the verse to expectedly be ill nice job
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Old 07-27-04, 09:20 AM   #4
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shit was nice i felt it keep doin yo thang homie check out my newest shit venomous spit wit country or my new freewrite thanx holla back n keep postin peace
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Old 07-27-04, 09:33 AM   #5
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Thats a pretty hot rhyme dawg, nice flow with good content. uppin for another verse.
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Old 07-27-04, 09:37 AM   #6
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Old 07-27-04, 09:53 AM   #7
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that was hot man, feeling that. i agree, you could have been a bit more creative with imagery and wordplay and stuff, but the hook especially was real nice. keep doing ya thing and check my song when you got the time!
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Old 07-27-04, 10:14 AM   #8
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thanx for da feedback uppin dis shit
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