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Best Verse Ever
the three macks'll make ya lean back/
u wanna fuck wit my click but where ya team at/ its the motherfuckin soldiers ready 4 war/ put a couple in ya face and leave ya head to pour/ once this shit drop the game is done/ u can get mo shots to the face than jenna jameson/ Spit verbal ballistics/ that'll hit ya click quick/ i spit that sick shit/ Da Soldiers ready 4 war i told ya men/ reppin for big,pac,pun,l, and soulja slim/ it's me against the world like scarface in the last scene/ we make mad cream/ put red dots on ya face like acne/ ak's the hottest, makin motherfuckin tracks steam/ Push mo keys than Ray Charles/ fuck wit me, leave wit mo stiches than a baseball/ the 4-5th 'll blow ya face off/ the illest lyricist/ u know this shit is sick/ cowards can get blown like President Clintons dick/ dont be ignorant/ that'll make the mack start spittin quick/ Ak's sendin pussy-ass bitches tips/ I spit street scripture/ the hollow tips'll hit ya/ i use these verses to paint ghetto pictures/ :shoot: |
elevate.make your bars real bars not half bars.
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thanx 4 feedback
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Also,use more wordplay in your verse,dont keep it too basic.
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yo, was the lyrics tight? i mean i wasnt really worried about the structure. it was just a mix of a bunch of stuff ive written.just tryna get some feedback on this.i'm still kinda young(13) so im tryna improve. i was speakin true shit tho. i aint fakin what im sayin.
if im busy i sick my soldier ricky/ my soldier ricky is sick/ Ricky Syx/ sendin six from the six sixes your way/ there gon be sixty-six shots that make sixty six bodies drop today/ is that some good wordplay? |
Your alright fix your structure a bit
Your lyrics are okay elavate Pc |
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Av' Summed It Up There.. |
this was wack your structure was fucked same wit everything else
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Okkk
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ayo,they pretty much summed it up for ya but don't put /// at the end especially if ya gonna continue ta with short lines it makes it hard ta read n don't look great..aight pc
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