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08-03-04, 03:03 PM | #1 | ||||||
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Best Verse Ever
IP: 3E4C EA5E
the three macks'll make ya lean back/
u wanna fuck wit my click but where ya team at/ its the motherfuckin soldiers ready 4 war/ put a couple in ya face and leave ya head to pour/ once this shit drop the game is done/ u can get mo shots to the face than jenna jameson/ Spit verbal ballistics/ that'll hit ya click quick/ i spit that sick shit/ Da Soldiers ready 4 war i told ya men/ reppin for big,pac,pun,l, and soulja slim/ it's me against the world like scarface in the last scene/ we make mad cream/ put red dots on ya face like acne/ ak's the hottest, makin motherfuckin tracks steam/ Push mo keys than Ray Charles/ fuck wit me, leave wit mo stiches than a baseball/ the 4-5th 'll blow ya face off/ the illest lyricist/ u know this shit is sick/ cowards can get blown like President Clintons dick/ dont be ignorant/ that'll make the mack start spittin quick/ Ak's sendin pussy-ass bitches tips/ I spit street scripture/ the hollow tips'll hit ya/ i use these verses to paint ghetto pictures/ |
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08-03-04, 03:15 PM | #2 | |||||
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IP: A621 A1C1
elevate.make your bars real bars not half bars.
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08-03-04, 03:38 PM | #3 | ||||||
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IP: 3E4C EA5E
thanx 4 feedback
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08-03-04, 03:47 PM | #4 | |||||
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IP: A621 A1C1
Also,use more wordplay in your verse,dont keep it too basic.
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08-03-04, 04:44 PM | #5 | ||||||
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IP: 3E4C EA5E
yo, was the lyrics tight? i mean i wasnt really worried about the structure. it was just a mix of a bunch of stuff ive written.just tryna get some feedback on this.i'm still kinda young(13) so im tryna improve. i was speakin true shit tho. i aint fakin what im sayin.
if im busy i sick my soldier ricky/ my soldier ricky is sick/ Ricky Syx/ sendin six from the six sixes your way/ there gon be sixty-six shots that make sixty six bodies drop today/ is that some good wordplay? |
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08-03-04, 06:53 PM | #6 | |||||||
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Your alright fix your structure a bit
Your lyrics are okay elavate Pc |
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08-04-04, 01:01 AM | #7 | ||||||
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Quote:
Av' Summed It Up There..
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08-04-04, 04:13 AM | #8 | ||||||
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this was wack your structure was fucked same wit everything else
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08-04-04, 04:16 AM | #9 | |||||
[Merk-ology 101...Schools In]
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Okkk
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you try to spit hot lines but ya computer freezes/ my flows is picture perfect so no need for "cheezes"/ ---Ohhh, and ya welcome....4 what?.....The free sample. Open Battles -none 4 now- |
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08-04-04, 04:20 AM | #10 | ||||
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IP: 88E6 6CAA
ayo,they pretty much summed it up for ya but don't put /// at the end especially if ya gonna continue ta with short lines it makes it hard ta read n don't look great..aight pc
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