Hip-Hop In Japan
Hip-Hop In Japan
On microphones thunder great and undertake responsibility Rip shop by hand like Hip-Hop in Japan it’s grown silly Like true magnets or dew rag wet Hip-Hop clings to brains And make things plain in japan its on tiptop and sling flames In a world larger than Pearl Harbor its Ebonics are atomic fields Some travel wise with lyrics galvanize like steel the hype real Nowadays Hip-Hop somehow plays with the structure and deal With cultures, in Japan they lay hand on rap like Ghetto blacks Yet doe facts remain nice, hot and sick like rice and chopsticks smacks Kimchee on plates, wearing baggy pants into saggy romance Blessed in the bold fury sling gold jewelry every shaggy chance Now the Tokyo symbol grow to resemble streets of LA Speak well today the Japanese, rapping MC’S excel to stay On top with strong drops of microphone Hip Hop the shops Are thrill hot ill customers buy tons Hip Hop like crops Shibuya has grown higher youth place in Japan it rocks Guiness records claim millions in profit as Jap rap Hip Hop it In Japan the HipHop flow grooving and not slow moving Baggy clothes are exposed even wear saggy robe comfort and soothing Japanese artists rap these modest verses and madly step to Gladly help to structure their culture now main stream wealth due Now in Japan Hip-Hop is known glory with long story that follows |
the content was good, but most of your lines don't make any sense and the structure is off. it's a shame cos i really like the idea... but don't just throw random words into your sentences to get as many multis as possible, think about what you are writing. try mix it up with more wordplay and just go back over and improve. 6/10. peace!
ps. check my open mic if you get time |
yo that was a good piece why is you 0 and 2 you seem aight whats going on spit hard shit like that and get some wins :thumbup:
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Yo that was a tight drop nice vocab the flow was cold
It was cool Check this Open Mic http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=140020 ASIAN PRIDE LAter Pc |
thanks for the props and the critique got to keep on doing this I think I got my point across
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yo i was actually in japan a few years ago and the hop-hop scene out there is crazy!!!
I was chillin' up in Sendai... them kats wear more hip-hop shyt then I do and i been all about reppin the culture for as long as i could remember! They do it old scholl out there...they still do breaking and crew battles in the clubs... on some wild YOU GOT SERVED type shyt... be outside practicing they routines and everything... don't sleep on Japan, y'all... they throw up gang signs like they in Cali... be riding through the "DRIVE THROUGH" mall bouncing ; killing it with the hydraulics! *a fucking drive through mall... I done seen everything!*... they rep the culture almost better than we do... felt like i was in a time warp watching a scene straight outta BEAT STREET or BREAKIN'... yeah, but uhhh... ya joint was cool... kinda confusing in some parts but it was interesting... just wanted to see if you had the same experience I had from when I was there... by the way... Japan got the best Mickey D's I ever had.... everything is made fresh to order and they bring it to ya table!... No heat lamps... straight off da grill, baby! When I got back I ain't eat at McDonalds for like 3 months... they all just seemed dirty compared to Japan's...lol...one |
Ill-Grammatix thanks for the props and the response for real dawg
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umm to be honest 3/10 my feedback same as cerlean lol
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thans for the fedback and critique
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