Hip-Hop In Japan

On microphones thunder great and undertake responsibility
Rip shop by hand like Hip-Hop in Japan it’s grown silly
Like true magnets or dew rag wet Hip-Hop clings to brains
And make things plain in japan its on tiptop and sling flames
In a world larger than Pearl Harbor its Ebonics are atomic fields
Some travel wise with lyrics galvanize like steel the hype real
Nowadays Hip-Hop somehow plays with the structure and deal
With cultures, in Japan they lay hand on rap like Ghetto blacks
Yet doe facts remain nice, hot and sick like rice and chopsticks smacks
Kimchee on plates, wearing baggy pants into saggy romance
Blessed in the bold fury sling gold jewelry every shaggy chance
Now the Tokyo symbol grow to resemble streets of LA
Speak well today the Japanese, rapping MC’S excel to stay
On top with strong drops of microphone Hip Hop the shops
Are thrill hot ill customers buy tons Hip Hop like crops
Shibuya has grown higher youth place in Japan it rocks
Guiness records claim millions in profit as Jap rap Hip Hop it
In Japan the HipHop flow grooving and not slow moving
Baggy clothes are exposed even wear saggy robe comfort and soothing
Japanese artists rap these modest verses and madly step to
Gladly help to structure their culture now main stream wealth due
Now in Japan Hip-Hop is known glory with long story that follows

the content was good, but most of your lines don't make any sense and the structure is off. it's a shame cos i really like the idea... but don't just throw random words into your sentences to get as many multis as possible, think about what you are writing. try mix it up with more wordplay and just go back over and improve. 6/10. peace!

ps. check my open mic if you get time

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yo that was a good piece why is you 0 and 2 you seem aight whats going on spit hard shit like that and get some wins

Yo that was a tight drop nice vocab the flow was cold
It was cool
Check this Open Mic
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thanks for the props and the critique got to keep on doing this I think I got my point across

yo i was actually in japan a few years ago and the hop-hop scene out there is crazy!!!
I was chillin' up in Sendai... them kats wear more hip-hop shyt then I do and i been all about reppin the culture for as long as i could remember! They do it old scholl out there...they still do breaking and crew battles in the clubs... on some wild YOU GOT SERVED type shyt... be outside practicing they routines and everything... don't sleep on Japan, y'all... they throw up gang signs like they in Cali... be riding through the "DRIVE THROUGH" mall bouncing ; killing it with the hydraulics! *a fucking drive through mall... I done seen everything!*... they rep the culture almost better than we do... felt like i was in a time warp watching a scene straight outta BEAT STREET or BREAKIN'... yeah, but uhhh... ya joint was cool... kinda confusing in some parts but it was interesting... just wanted to see if you had the same experience I had from when I was there... by the way... Japan got the best Mickey D's I ever had.... everything is made fresh to order and they bring it to ya table!... No heat lamps... straight off da grill, baby! When I got back I ain't eat at McDonalds for like 3 months... they all just seemed dirty compared to Japan's...lol...one

Ill-Grammatix thanks for the props and the response for real dawg

umm to be honest 3/10 my feedback same as cerlean lol

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