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Empire vs VALOR
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POETRY BATTLE-TOPIC-A LOVED ONE DIED HOW DO YOU FEEL UNLIMITED Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting BATTLE C.S vs THE COUNCIL Minimum posts to vote: 200 Check in by: 10-05-04 at 12:33 AM Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in. |
VALOR has ACCEPTED this battle on 10-03-04 02:53 AM.
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Empire has ACCEPTED this battle on 10-03-04 11:21 AM.
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No answer for the cancer that wrecked ya system with painfull conviction
Cant take the loss no source can provide me with ample description Still whising for times passed where we cried and laughed memorys that i cherish Im embarassed cuz men dont cry but my tears flow no lie im broken inside Gave me insight to the meaning of life but i cant comprehend trust me i tried Cuz you died.... and the loss is like air with you not there i cant breath when you not by my side Heart heavy i wasnt ready used to cry together now my tears flow from my lonely presence When i lost you i lost me too it seems or souls were on some level connected Shuffle through pictures guzzling liquor trying to dull the pain but nothing will work Its amzing how something in GODs plans could cause a man so much of a hurt My brain cant focus it seems hopeless contemplating on following you on your path Cuz i dont think i can take it how can i make it and nowhere to focus my wrath Got me lost what cost is love when you lose the person you share it with? Ive been through mental help its apparent its useless with threapists Watch movies pause frames slow motion like ball games catch a glimpse of ya features This all i got to visualize cuz you above me in blue skys to far away to reach ya You was my sun my heat on earth my solatiare protection from societys cold You dieing hit me hard thats why im still crying as im writing these words from my soul |
I remember when i allways felt down you were always there to let me know that some things in life just are never fair through my ups and downs you always believed in me then you left the planet my heart now feels shallow n empty your were my role model i looked up to you always feelin all of your advice was the truth and was i hope... but your no longer here for me , i cant cope im feelin this deep grief ,with a sick feeling in my stomach raw material,with raw instinct i cannot describe my feelings are no longer there..but im trying to keep my head up in life,but its hard to stop crying wish i can hug you for that comfort that i desire to need its like the days that past by and your not here my heart bleeds feeled with grief...ever since my moms told me about my lost i fail into dis belief you were okay just the other day...... *prays* ''please remain in my heart and look after me remain friends with my sole and be that serviving seed dont ever leave my side... that soft loving personality you cannot hide so loving that you are now my favorite angel continue to teach and preach me through life from all different angles and even if its now and forever you must rest diceased ill pray and make sure you and your sole will forever rest in peace'' *puts his head down and cry's softly* |
Voted For: VALOR
I remember when i allways felt down you were always there to let me know that some things in life just are never fair through my ups and downs you always believed in me then you left the planet my heart now feels shallow n empty ^^^^^^^^ OOOOOOOOO DATS DEEP MAYNE your were my role model i looked up to you always feelin all of your advice was the truth and was i hope... but your no longer here for me , i cant cope ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ (GRAB AN TISSUE) NICE MAYNE DEEP FEELINGS im feelin this deep grief ,with a sick feeling in my stomach raw material,with raw instinct i cannot describe my feelings are no longer there..but im trying to keep my head up in life,but its hard to stop crying ^^^^^^^^^^^^^ NICE MAYNE GOOD DEEPA FEELINGS wish i can hug you for that comfort that i desire to need its like the days that past by and your not here my heart bleeds feeled with grief...ever since my moms told me about my lost i fail into dis belief you were okay just the other day...... ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ AIGHT DATS TIGHT GOOD IMAGINARY DEEP FEELINGS *prays* ''please remain in my heart and look after me remain friends with my sole and be that serviving seed dont ever leave my side... that soft loving personality you cannot hide so loving that you are now my favorite angel continue to teach and preach me through life from all different angles and even if its now and forever you must rest diceased ill pray and make sure you and your sole will forever rest in peace'' *puts his head down and cry's softly* ^^^^^^^^^^^^ (BLOW HIS NOSE) NICE MAYNE GOOD PIECE HERE MAYNE UR GOOD NICE VALOR-DEEP FEELINGS,,,,,,,,EXPRESSION,,,,,,,,,,,PAINTIN AN GOOD PICTURE,,,,,,,,,8/10 No answer for the cancer that wrecked ya system with painfull conviction Cant take the loss no source can provide me with ample description Still whising for times passed where we cried and laughed memorys that i cherish Im embarassed cuz men dont cry but my tears flow no lie im broken inside Gave me insight to the meaning of life but i cant comprehend trust me i tried Cuz you died.... and the loss is like air with you not there i cant breath when you not by my side ^^^^^^^^^^^GOOD FLOW,,,,,,,,,EXPRESS MORE FEELINGS GET INTO DA DETAILS Heart heavy i wasnt ready used to cry together now my tears flow from my lonely presence When i lost you i lost me too it seems or souls were on some level connected Shuffle through pictures guzzling liquor trying to dull the pain but nothing will work Its amzing how something in GODs plans could cause a man so much of a hurt My brain cant focus it seems hopeless contemplating on following you on your path ^^^^^^^^^^^^^ NICE FLOW AGAIN NEED DEEPER EXPRESSION GET INTO DA DETAILS MORE FEELINGS Cuz i dont think i can take it how can i make it and nowhere to focus my wrath Got me lost what cost is love when you lose the person you share it with? Ive been through mental help its apparent its useless with threapists Watch movies pause frames slow motion like ball games catch a glimpse of ya features This all i got to visualize cuz you above me in blue skys to far away to reach ya You was my sun my heat on earth my solatiare protection from societys cold You dieing hit me hard thats why im still crying as im writing these words from my soul ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ AIGHT DA LAST PART WAS GOOD DEEP MAYNE,,,,,,,,,NICE EMPIRE-HAD GOOD FLOW,,,,,,,,,,IMAGINARY,,,,,,,,FEELINGS (NEEDS MORE) I VOTE FOR VALOR CAUSE HE HAD DEEP FEELINGS AND LOT OF EXPRESSION HE GOT INTO DA DETAILS OF HOW HE FELT~! EMPIRE WHEN U DO ANOTHA POETRY BATTLE PUT DOWN MORE FEELINGS NICE FLOW BUT ATTATCH DAT WITH DEEPER FEELINGS MAYNE ACT LIKE ITS TRUE PAINT AN PICTURE~! ~PEACE~ |
Voted For: Empire
Empire used a lil more vocab could really feel ya verse like if it was me goin through it shit was hot VALOR shit was koo u had better structure verse was koo just felt Empires a lil more but overall nice verse and good battle vote on da battles in my sig i voted on ya battle |
This was feedback posted for VALOR
checkin the polls..
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DATS NOT AN GOOD EXPLAINATION U GOTS TO BREAK IT DOWN DATS NOT HOW U BREAK IT DOWN ~PEACE~ JUST NOTIFYING |
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even more explaination just incase Empires was a lil more descriptive 2 me i could really imagine his verse Valors ending and structure was koo but Empires overall verse was better |
Uppin This Battle...........
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uppin number 2 in this shit
comeon u herb ass sleepers |
This was feedback posted for VALOR
nuff sed valor gots this.....both did gud..........
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This was feedback posted for VALOR
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This was feedback posted for VALOR
damn man you beat this kid..........valor you kuilled this kid.....just uppin for the crew batttle
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