First Time Rhyme
 

Some new trouble starts but it ain't the red or blue/
who gon die next? could be me or you/

A young foo said sumthin bout an OG in his hood/
he didn't realize behind him was where da OG stood/

gunshots reigned out, as we all anticipated/
young dude was hit, almost decapitated/

ppl screamed as they heard the hammer pound/
chaos spread cuz a dat one simple sound/

only the fake ran, as we stood our ground/
da OG saw only me, when he turned around/

i hit him in da jaw, made his pussy lips bleed/
like a chick on her rag, when i can't plant my seed/

da cops came outta nowhere, one hit me wit his billy/
i said the fuck the police, & whipped him wit my nine milli/

eazy woulda been proud if he could hear dat line/
but we all know his story and dat was mine/

what y'all think...i dont really think it's great but hey...first timer here..gimme sum feedback

uppin fo my homey, werd

Nice Mayne Structure Was nice flow was nice but then you lost me on "I Couldnt plant My seed'' Line But N E Ways Id give ya a
8.5/10 KEep It Up

that wuz dopeness

Good Nice Flow Good Vocab

U Took Me Off At Some Parts Like King~dipset Said

But It Was Nice Homie

Give Ya 8/10 Word Nice Vocab

Put An Feedback In My Open Mic Tha Lightning

Plz I'll Preciated Homie Thanks Keep Doing Ya Thang

i liked it holmes, i give it a 8.5/10, good shit essay :thumbup:

Yo man like others said up the vocab, other than that flow, structure, all that was decent.

uppin fo my homey again, werd