murkin mad dog
 

much better than the last

listen up mad dog your audio banjo song clearly sucked
but mad dog you are kinda gettin used to havin audio fucked
^Don't really get it....

I mean your just a plain faggot you think your verses are kool
bitch your rappin like a clown and your middle name is fool
^Don't get it..

Stupid ass every single word of yours gets me frustrated
It's like your such a bitch you actually like to be hated
^not bad I can see where your going..

you think you it and I wish you died at birth in ya minites
mad dog is just born retarded but pretends he don't give a shit
^Dont make any sense

mutha fucker whach where ya steppin I shoot ya wid ma weapon
my verse shits on you teachin you dumass a big lesson
^WTF LMAO


You an't nothin but it hurts me dat you say dat ur somethin
Okay hear it is your GAY now bitch learn to quit frontin
^Ok but calling someone GAY is well played now come with
something original

cause im'a keep sonnin while ur in a van wid dad humpin
Your just twisted you'll never gonna be the one who's gifted
^Dont rhyme

your the type to get punched in ya fat face knock down hitted
I'll smack the fuckin shit outat ya till ya fall on right on ya back
^WTF

fuck you up bitch punch your back till your fuckin vetibrai snaps
every word Im spittin his gettin your stickin ass down n pitted
^WTF

as soon as you read dis you'll have both wrists on ya slitted
Just go home dog i'm leavin you dead wid your head splitted
^kINDA oK close

Still need to elevate man, come with more original punches
improve your vocab... and sort your flow out. You seem to
have lost your spark man you was elevatin alright a few months
ago but you kinda lost it.

1~

you are still terrible, work hard school, get smarter, then start writting again...I wouldn't ussually say this but your beef with mad dog, should have been over two months ago...this is like the 30th you've wrote about him...what do you want to fuck him or something, I mean seriously...wtf

listen up mad dog your audio banjo song clearly sucked
but mad dog you are kinda gettin used to havin audio fucked
/\ An ok opener good flow

I mean your just a plain faggot you think your verses are kool
bitch your rappin like a clown and your middle name is fool
/\ wack...no punch and what kjind of personal was that???

Stupid ass every single word of yours gets me frustrated
It's like your such a bitch you actually like to be hated
/\...no comment

you think you it and I wish you died at birth in ya minites
mad dog is just born retarded but pretends he don't give a shit
/\ again wtf!?!...

mutha fucker whach where ya steppin I shoot ya wid ma weapon
my verse shits on you teachin you dumass a big lesson
/\ blah @ this bar

You an't nothin but it hurts me dat you say dat ur somethin
Okay hear it is your GAY now bitch learn to quit frontin
cause im'a keep sonnin while ur in a van wid dad humpin
/\ 3 line rhyme...blah all lines

Your just twisted you'll never gonna be the one who's gifted
your the type to get punched in ya fat face knock down hitted
/\ senseless rhyme

I'll smack the fuckin shit outat ya till ya fall on right on ya back
fuck you up bitch punch your back till your fuckin vetibrai snaps
/\ blah @ this bar again

every word Im spittin his gettin your stickin ass down n pitted
as soon as you read dis you'll have both wrists on ya slitted
Just go home dog i'm leavin you dead wid your head splitted
/\ blah closer

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1st bar good punch/personal but everything else was wack again...flow and structure again was the only thing going for you...

Please Go Away Sinner.....
 

listen up mad dog your audio banjo song clearly sucked
but mad dog you are kinda gettin used to havin audio fucked
^THIS DOES NOT MAKE SENSE.
I mean your just a plain faggot you think your verses are kool
bitch your rappin like a clown and your middle name is fool
^YOUR MIDDLE NAMES PRE-SCHOOL WIT THAT BAR.LOL
Stupid ass every single word of yours gets me frustrated
It's like your such a bitch you actually like to be hated
^NO.NO.NO.NO
you think you it and I wish you died at birth in ya minites
mad dog is just born retarded but pretends he don't give a shit
^WTF?....DIED AT BIRTH IN YA MINITES????WTF?
mutha fucker whach where ya steppin I shoot ya wid ma weapon
my verse shits on you teachin you dumass a big lesson
^^SPELLING MISTAKES, ARE ALL-ROUND WANK BAR
You an't nothin but it hurts me dat you say dat ur somethin
Okay hear it is your GAY now bitch learn to quit frontin
cause im'a keep sonnin while ur in a van wid dad humpin
^3 LINES....KNOB.
Your just twisted you'll never gonna be the one who's gifted
your the type to get punched in ya fat face knock down hitted
^DUMB TWAT..THIS DOESNT MAKE FUKIN SENSE
I'll smack the fuckin shit outat ya till ya fall on right on ya back
fuck you up bitch punch your back till your fuckin vetibrai snaps
^..SO?, NO PUNCH
every word Im spittin his gettin your stickin ass down n pitted
as soon as you read dis you'll have both wrists on ya slitted
Just go home dog i'm leavin you dead wid your head splitted
_^^^^^ 3 LINES?....U TIT_________________





NO PUNCHES, NO NOTHIN...
U BIN ON THIS SITE AT LEAST SIX MONTHS,AND U ARE STILL SPOUTING THE MOST HORENDOUS BARS IVE EVER WITNESSED, GO AWAY, U R TERRIBLE, U HAVE NO I.Q, AND CANNOT BE TAUGHT A FUKIN THING,U CNT SPELL, CNT RHYME 2 SIMPLE FUKIN WORDS, LIKE I SAID B4 SINNER

U R A COCK.period

T storm fuck off you geek.. word heres a punch mutah fucker

your Dumb because your the most gayest critic
you need your dick sucked to Cumm up wid lyrics

listen up mad dog your audio banjo song clearly sucked
but mad dog you are kinda gettin used to havin audio fucked
-"EH" KINDA DIDNT MAKE SENSE BUT GOOD FLOW HOMIE NOT AN GOOOD PUNCH

I mean your just a plain faggot you think your verses are kool
bitch your rappin like a clown and your middle name is fool
-"EH" PLAYED NOT AN GOOD PUNCH ELEVATE ON THEM PUNCHES HOMIE GOOD FLOW THOUGH

Stupid ass every single word of yours gets me frustrated
It's like your such a bitch you actually like to be hated
-"EH" AGAIN NOT AN GOOD PUNCH...ITS NOT EVEN HARD HITTIN


you think you it and I wish you died at birth in ya minites
mad dog is just born retarded but pretends he don't give a shit
-HUH WTF.................NO-NO NOT AN GOOD PUNCH


mutha fucker whach where ya steppin I shoot ya wid ma weapon
my verse shits on you teachin you dumass a big lesson
-KINDA PLAYED AND NOT AN GOOD PUNCH


You an't nothin but it hurts me dat you say dat ur somethin
Okay hear it is your GAY now bitch learn to quit frontin
cause im'a keep sonnin while ur in a van wid dad humpin
-"WHOA GAY PUNCHES ARE PLAYED" COME CREATIVE THAN THAT


Your just twisted you'll never gonna be the one who's gifted
your the type to get punched in ya fat face knock down hitted
-O AIIIGHT I FELT THIS ONE GOOD ONE NICE


I'll smack the fuckin shit outat ya till ya fall on right on ya back
fuck you up bitch punch your back till your fuckin vetibrai snaps
-ITS NOT DECENT BUT ITS AN PUNCH "OK"

every word Im spittin his gettin your stickin ass down n pitted
as soon as you read dis you'll have both wrists on ya slitted
Just go home dog i'm leavin you dead wid your head splitted
- NOT AN GOOD CLOSA, PLUS NOT AN GOOD PUNCH


ALRIGHT THIS WHOLE VERSE KINDA WACK~!, NO HARD HITTIN PUNCHES, NO PUNCHES WERE DECENT, BUT GOOD FLOW AND STRUTURE , BUT WORK ON THEM PUNCHES ELEVATE AIIIIGHT

real wack......

this was wack your punches lacked and as a mater of fact i dont eevn knwo why u wrote this rap....and thats that...
lol got bored.just bein real tho
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peace~1