MY baby girl
 

i seen something else on here about a baby girl... but heres my version... im not tryin to steal anyones idea or anything.... but this is something that id been messing with for a while....give me some feedback

this goes out to my baby girl
the one who lights my world
a beautiful stranger, lost, alone
maybe if only u would just come home
i sit and i wait, patiently
why, baby girl, cant you see
i heard once that destiny is chosen
then does that mean we are frozen
always stuck in one place
seeing each other, but not face to face
i cant understand what happened to us
i guess it all went wrong when u got on that bus
away you went to learn the ways of the world
but remember, you always be my baby girl

chorus -
I have to ask myself why
but then i realize
it wasnt a choice for me to make
it was love desicion, real or fake
x2

That day that you left i can still remember
i promised myself it would be a long december
but it still felt like the days wouldnt end
cause i was alone with out my best friend
i tried to take my mind off you
but that i just couldnt do
every time you would visit i would get the chills
but it seemed that you just wanted the same thrills
i thot it was more than just the physical
i guess i was the only one rapped up emotional
and i think you might have just changed
or maybe different feelings were being exchanged
maybe you did learn the way of the world
but remember your still my baby girl

chorus - x2

Now I think about what happened and try
And I tell my self that thugs don’t cry
girl u got me like crazy, thinkin about sharin a name
but i aint no peanut so u cant put salt in my game
but its scary girl cause lately you been trippin
and i need a steady girl to ride not be slippin
but still you been there when i was down
and for that on your head i put the crown
cause no matter what its you and me
and thats why we stay sucka free
you kno i got you and i can open the door
i guess this is really bonnie and clyde '04
and forget what you learned about the word
remember your still my baby girl

chorus - x2
chorus to fade

That's dope bud lot of emotion hook was pretty clean but kinda short add like four more bars and it'll be the shit.


one..

aight, i was thinkin about maybe adding this

but still girl im here for you
no matter what u got your baby boo

this wasent that good...for a girl song you camw weak on the poetry...and steals my title i shal kill you:)....3/10....

thaqt was iight nigga
4.20/10

thanx 4 tha feedback.... and sorry about the name thing...haha

was pretty bad lol just tellin the truth....if you wanna battle hit me up...1

Yes........Terrible....I did'nt Like It....Very Boring....Bland....No Vocab....Or Emotion...

nice man that had some emo and flow keep it comin im new to this shyt too man so hook me up with some feed homie http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=162583