•Seething•Blizzard•(Life-101)•
 

(hook, borrowed from Eminem's chorus from "Kim", re-worded)


lyrical infractions catch pain in words and action/
when culture satisfaction became a national subtraction/
laughin' at your brother from another mother coughing up blood/
thinking its a joke when he's scoffing with a shrug/
to your every piece of advice that finally ends with an uncompleted life/
a defeated knife lies in the street, never had to fight to enter our home/
once upon a time *BANG* now i'm all alone/

so long, *click* you were so strong, what would go wrong, in this world all about you/
so long, *click* you were so strong, what would go wrong, in this world all about you/

feel the pain, feel the rain of collected tears/
count the seconds of selected years given to kids these days/
when kids give in to freeways out this life, makin' death a relay/
i don't have enough breath to speak what i say, so i just dream it/
watch the world spin on a president's finger trying to reach it/
when i can't bleed its sorrow for the story... it begins and ends/
once upon a time *BANG* no one pretends/

so long, *click* you were so strong, what would go wrong, in this world all about you/
so long, *click* you were so strong, what would go wrong, in this world all about you/

i miss all the friends i've never had, i miss all the experience that i've never grabbed/
in another life, i'd wanna do this twice, just to feel what i'm feeling now/
never would i wanna be that kid with the car playing Eminem really loud/
or the next vanilla ice thinking that i'm feeling proud/
testing 1. 2. umm... 12, "can you feel me now?"/
i just washed the mirror with windex, "that's the real me... wow"/
i'm in my room filling up the chamber/
"i'm sorry world, i just want you to feel my anger"/
*BANG* 6 and 10 o' clock news, no more neighborhood stranger/

so long, *click* you were so strong, what would go wrong, in this world all about you/
so long, *click* you were so strong, what would go wrong, in this world all about you/
so long, *BANG* i thought i was so strong... i was so wrong, living in this world not about me/(fade)


signed,
~ProfessoR

hey...
 

nice piece kidd...hmm glad to see more peeps postin up in this area...much luv..God bless..always elevate...1.

to your every piece of advice that finally ends with an uncompleted life/

that was a hott bar hun..........it stuck out to me......kinda of a serious issue...n all.........but you pulled it off well............props...and peep mah peice below please........much luv........oh yea teh format was nice n even very nice

Dope ish babyboi,
flowed well ...
Diggin ya style!

Keep doin ur thang ...

Pz xXx DiMe
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very good piece all the way through...worded so well...structured so well....overall was a well executed piece...had some real strong truths....some cynical....some not so....

...respect....