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Back at it Again
im back at it again......
Brick Wall we used to kick it wen we were young, i thought i knew
.who u were, but i was wrong, u werent holdin true u were holdin back, and retreatin back home alone locked the door on ur soul, and they key was gone and now im starin at a brick wall that ur buildin up every brick represents the trust... that uve given up its cemented with the lies u believe from other people but i can see through- all that shit that i could breathe through all that shit, and see you, a cryin lil girl, in ur tiny lil world and everytime uve been lied to, its grown and unfurled another wall goes up, until ur surrounded by all four no windows now no door, no more to explore no more of those nights, u wont even let in the light of hope, with no cope of the world, this- is not life u hide from the hugs, u tried to hide from the love built a roof from the heavens, so u can hide from above ............................u WERE-- a diamond in the rough........ . . now you gotta whole home, no 'fones', no 'tone', for ur protection?
.from the World, no 'strings attached', no 'cords', no 'connection' we were the 'same', thought perfection, but now were seated in different sections tore down all the 'mirrors', too afraid to look, and that you'd see my 'reflection' its my recollection that you sed we'd be together 'till death be mentioned i know i showed signs of reprehension, but you're mine till the endin ......Girl............................its time for ur resurrection go Kilo . . |
^^^^damn, not even a view yet
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nice expressing it, use more vocab words cause its too basic, shit nice wordplay nice struture overall-8/10 uppin on the vocabs peace (you need 2 links to post your open mic) |
yea i know......... ill hit urs up :thumbup: yea i went basic kinda for the story tellin
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post1848494 http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post1848514 |
damn dawg...... u did DAT in 10 minutes??????????? ay we should do a collab or sumthin off dat. hit me back wit a pm if u want 2 den i'll pm my verse 2 u.
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uppin for some more feed
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this was pretty nice...flow was there and some good punches...vocab was a little basic but other than that...this was a good drop...8/10
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uppin for a lil more feed
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good drop, rhyme's are ok, flow is allright.
overall 7/10 |
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