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Old 12-27-04, 03:11 AM   #1
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im back at it again......

Brick Wall


we used to kick it wen we were young, i thought i knew
who u were, but i was wrong, u werent holdin true
u were holdin back, and retreatin back home alone
locked the door on ur soul, and they key was gone
and now im starin at a brick wall that ur buildin up
every brick represents the trust... that uve given up
its cemented with the lies u believe from other people
but i can see through- all that shit that i could breathe through
all that shit, and see you, a cryin lil girl, in ur tiny lil world
and everytime uve been lied to, its grown and unfurled
another wall goes up, until ur surrounded by all four
no windows now no door, no more to explore
no more of those nights, u wont even let in the light
of hope, with no cope of the world, this- is not life
u hide from the hugs, u tried to hide from the love
built a roof from the heavens, so u can hide from above
............................u WERE-- a diamond in the rough........
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now you gotta whole home, no 'fones', no 'tone', for ur protection?
from the World, no 'strings attached', no 'cords', no 'connection'
we were the 'same', thought perfection, but now were seated in different sections
tore down all the 'mirrors', too afraid to look, and that you'd see my 'reflection'
its my recollection that you sed we'd be together 'till death be mentioned
i know i showed signs of reprehension, but you're mine till the endin
......Girl............................its time for ur resurrection
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go Kilo
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Old 12-27-04, 02:05 PM   #2
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^^^^damn, not even a view yet
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Old 12-27-04, 02:38 PM   #3
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OK


nice expressing it, use more vocab words cause its too basic, shit nice wordplay nice struture


overall-8/10 uppin on the vocabs

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Old 12-27-04, 02:57 PM   #4
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yea i know......... ill hit urs up yea i went basic kinda for the story tellin

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post1848494

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post1848514
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Old 12-27-04, 08:12 PM   #5
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damn dawg...... u did DAT in 10 minutes??????????? ay we should do a collab or sumthin off dat. hit me back wit a pm if u want 2 den i'll pm my verse 2 u.
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Old 12-28-04, 02:17 AM   #6
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uppin for some more feed
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Old 12-28-04, 07:02 PM   #7
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Old 12-28-04, 10:40 PM   #8
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this was pretty nice...flow was there and some good punches...vocab was a little basic but other than that...this was a good drop...8/10
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Old 12-29-04, 09:05 PM   #9
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uppin for a lil more feed
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Old 12-29-04, 11:22 PM   #10
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good drop, rhyme's are ok, flow is allright.
overall 7/10
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