first freestyle
 

yo this my first time writin any shit down, took me like 5 minutes, i just got jumped by these bitchin drivin in a cadi and i wrote this shit..

mother fucker lay back in yer cadilac//
ima stay real for life, hand holdin a mac//
my alias be dat northern laid back//
harder den ice, breakin thru yer lil swayed back//
call yer homies to counteract dis ruthless onset//
real souljas don't debate, i bring pain//
you mother fuckers don't take me in vain//
deez streets r my stompin grounds, my house, my home//
don't fuck with me here cuz you'll just get owned//
wat i'm sayin is my element is yer demise//
step up to me and i'll relinquish yer life//

listenin to rap superstar instrumental when i freestyled, this, fixed it up then posted it. i need feedback, like i said this is my first time writin shit down.

its ok for the first time but you may need to work on your vocab a little because it came off just alittle weak so keep writing and you will improve