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02-04-05, 06:51 AM | #1 | |||||||
New to RV
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first freestyle
IP: A6A6 C97F
yo this my first time writin any shit down, took me like 5 minutes, i just got jumped by these bitchin drivin in a cadi and i wrote this shit..
mother fucker lay back in yer cadilac// ima stay real for life, hand holdin a mac// my alias be dat northern laid back// harder den ice, breakin thru yer lil swayed back// call yer homies to counteract dis ruthless onset// real souljas don't debate, i bring pain// you mother fuckers don't take me in vain// deez streets r my stompin grounds, my house, my home// don't fuck with me here cuz you'll just get owned// wat i'm sayin is my element is yer demise// step up to me and i'll relinquish yer life// listenin to rap superstar instrumental when i freestyled, this, fixed it up then posted it. i need feedback, like i said this is my first time writin shit down. |
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02-04-05, 03:55 PM | #2 | ||||||
New to RV
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IP: 8A9C ABD6
its ok for the first time but you may need to work on your vocab a little because it came off just alittle weak so keep writing and you will improve
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