fiona...................................
 

she came outta nowhere, no hair, another blessed soul
a baby featous layed flate like sneakers....her chest cold
her heart barely beating, blood seeping through her blue vains
the loves deepning as the days are creeping up on her cute frame
the babies sleeping so my lady sleeps in thinking of a new name
the mothers on her back, flat, her joints ache from the bad reflex
they got a special connection..so whenever she rests..she rests
all of a sudden theres n assumption of a malfunction in the mothers womb
could they save her life or would the baby die from an uncoverd wound
before she arrives at the hospis, doctors at the tables preparing em
air conditioners let loose da air in em...she sees da doctors n stares at em
x-rays??..their comparing em..then they decide da best thing is a seizarian
its like a dam because by now her waters have just broken through
her throat in tubes..doctors yelling we're about to open you......
the knives slice the skin, she tries not to cringe, the baby appears
her lives off da hinge...and coz of these things she cries da craziest tears
the baby is cleaned up..so she slowly n only just leans up
her dreams cut, as doctors n operating watchers team up
to tell her she'll be alone tonight..she just lets out moans a fright
she known ta fight...but aint fuck all she can coz fionas died....
its like dat guy richie film coz he orders da snatch, knowing her thoughts i'll react
her babies corpse is collapsed..a piece of fresh ground is found..so her daughters dispatched...............................

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cmon up this shit noones even at least said is wack eventhough i dun think it is

Yo I was feelin this shit I love it when rhymes is in story form and this one right here is emotional the topic is farely fresh not to many people rhyme about losing a child I kinda couldnt tell some of the words cause your spelling is out there but thats minor but this was hot drop ~respect

thx man uppin this.............................................. .....................................

this was aight, kinda stretched though..
i can see you were trying to get the facts out, a lil emotion in the verse
but your rhyme scheme was on n off throughout ya verse which kinda
made me lose interest...but it was still a decent drop DL......PZ

Yo yo this shit was iight B'. Words were stretched a lil bit but that dont mean their wasnt emo that I didn't see. Keep writing and holla back at cha boi.
Check out my shit and lemme know what's good.
Late
Sweft

damn shit gets slept on on dis site...

uppin this.............................

dis shit was defintily ill (if u split tha barz it wud be easier 2 read) i liked it 8.5/10 ~1ne~

i wud say..... 9/10 for me :), nice verse bro liked it.