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04-05-05, 07:56 AM | #1 | ||||||
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fiona...................................
IP: CD98 49E3
she came outta nowhere, no hair, another blessed soul
a baby featous layed flate like sneakers....her chest cold her heart barely beating, blood seeping through her blue vains the loves deepning as the days are creeping up on her cute frame the babies sleeping so my lady sleeps in thinking of a new name the mothers on her back, flat, her joints ache from the bad reflex they got a special connection..so whenever she rests..she rests all of a sudden theres n assumption of a malfunction in the mothers womb could they save her life or would the baby die from an uncoverd wound before she arrives at the hospis, doctors at the tables preparing em air conditioners let loose da air in em...she sees da doctors n stares at em x-rays??..their comparing em..then they decide da best thing is a seizarian its like a dam because by now her waters have just broken through her throat in tubes..doctors yelling we're about to open you...... the knives slice the skin, she tries not to cringe, the baby appears her lives off da hinge...and coz of these things she cries da craziest tears the baby is cleaned up..so she slowly n only just leans up her dreams cut, as doctors n operating watchers team up to tell her she'll be alone tonight..she just lets out moans a fright she known ta fight...but aint fuck all she can coz fionas died.... its like dat guy richie film coz he orders da snatch, knowing her thoughts i'll react her babies corpse is collapsed..a piece of fresh ground is found..so her daughters dispatched............................... |
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04-07-05, 09:54 AM | #2 | ||||||
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IP: CD98 49E3
uppin feedback.......................................... ..........................
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04-08-05, 11:13 AM | #3 | ||||||
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cmon up this shit noones even at least said is wack eventhough i dun think it is
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04-08-05, 12:51 PM | #4 | |||||||
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Yo I was feelin this shit I love it when rhymes is in story form and this one right here is emotional the topic is farely fresh not to many people rhyme about losing a child I kinda couldnt tell some of the words cause your spelling is out there but thats minor but this was hot drop ~respect
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04-11-05, 08:34 AM | #5 | ||||||
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thx man uppin this.............................................. .....................................
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04-11-05, 10:11 AM | #6 | ||||
leave you rest'n pz's
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this was aight, kinda stretched though..
i can see you were trying to get the facts out, a lil emotion in the verse but your rhyme scheme was on n off throughout ya verse which kinda made me lose interest...but it was still a decent drop DL......PZ
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04-11-05, 02:25 PM | #7 | ||||
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Yo yo this shit was iight B'. Words were stretched a lil bit but that dont mean their wasnt emo that I didn't see. Keep writing and holla back at cha boi.
Check out my shit and lemme know what's good. Late Sweft
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04-12-05, 11:39 AM | #8 | ||||||
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damn shit gets slept on on dis site...
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09-20-05, 08:25 AM | #9 | ||||||
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uppin this.............................
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09-20-05, 02:51 PM | #10 | |||||||
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dis shit was defintily ill (if u split tha barz it wud be easier 2 read) i liked it 8.5/10 ~1ne~
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09-20-05, 03:41 PM | #11 | |||||
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i wud say..... 9/10 for me , nice verse bro liked it.
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09-20-05, 09:46 PM | #12 | ||||
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Closed no link...
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