Barbie Doll
 

It's a song for my heavy metal band, but check it out anyways...


Barbie Doll

(Verse 1)
Look at you/
Smiling like you care/
But I see past your preppy wardrobe/
Your bitch blonde hair/
Perfectly manicured; a push-up bra/
So slutty in your way/
But once they realize the truth/
Will things still be okay?

(Chorus)
You're not a fucking barbie doll/
Not a fucking barbie doll/
Not a fucking barbie doll/
You're not a fucking barbie doll

(Verse 2)
Look at me/
Disgusted by your veiw/
Changing your life just to please them/
But I know the truth/
It's killing you, isn't it?/
I sense the pain you hide/
And you'll know wut I mean/
Once they leave you far behind

(Chorusx1)

(Outro)
No one's perfect/
Is it worth it?/
Putting yourself thru this pain?/
You try to please them/
Whay don't you leave them?/
Before they put your heart to shame?

No one is reading this, so I guess I'll have to up it... :(

I'm upping once again................

work on your structure... up your vocab...your verse's are way to short. and lack emotion i think.. i understand what your saying but say what you are saying in a more educated way ..... but anyways lol i like my blonde girls....


o yea make your chorus longer right now its to simple make it a little more complex and what kind of heavy metal? like screamoish ,educated metal...etc?

They're not too short, they're heavy metal... if it was any longer, it'd b like, 10 minutes long.... but thatnx for at least posting something....

upping once again........

Well, yeah. It was cool. Im into rock myself so I know what you mean.. why dont you like, do sound click and let us hear it. You might get a better responce...

Sweft

Oh, and I didnt come with no bull shit and still said somethin' positive even though you felt it was okay to call me a wigger. But I skate board and I like 3 days grace smile, smile empty soul, the used, trapt, sum 41, and I been to hella concerts and not one rap..
But Im not gonna hate on you, cuz I see you just judge a book by the cover. Whatever.. I liked your song or whatever just let us actually hear it.
www.soundclick.com

Sweft

yeye good stuff ma im so confused your frineds r fucking with me on aim im gonna kill them

yo this the wrong site yo we no heavy metal rockers mayn but aight i guess i really aint inta the screamin and that but atleast ya got ur shit across the net which shows me u tryin ta make it

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