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making Love to Her
I’m lost and trapped within the madness
of clashin passions fastened actions of opposable factions Relaxing, fashion of sensual combatants Let the beat climax n that’s when I’m back in droppin facts In Jackson knows no holding back kid Penetrating beats with no prophylactics shorty that’s when I’m on some folding back shit Only backwards n leave the instrumental holding the mattress I’m used to seeing Tracks in the suit known as birthday Spit game in the worse way and hit em on the 1st day I speak of goddesses, You cant deliver you’ll fall I treat the Music like a princess and give her my all Hand her my soul and listen as the magic unfolds I fly towards greatness whenever she has the controls Down I will go on her bass line fathoms below Licking the treble in tempo to manage the flow Delivery on time like postals Inserting my vocal The speaker’s her womb I leave her juicing loco But of course though, I’m attracted to smash hits Fact is I make love to tracks n off spring Classics links coming in a second |
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lol, crazy, nice flow in this, inners were everwhere...
this was nice, complexity was good, imagery was mad koo,. a little short but thats aight, metas n bar structure was very good, shit gets ya thinkin, nice work fam.......... |
upping for fed back!
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upp
stop sleepin |
Damn....this was ill
But of course though, I’m attracted to smash hits Fact is I make love to tracks n off spring Classics ^^^really feelin this shit....drop...gotta be a 10/10 Finally somebody rappin about different shit...keep em comin |
damn, mad hot
flow was good, vocab was great shit was straight fire |
that was so mad skill right there, very complex
liked the whole metaphoric rhyme scheme mad props i give it a 10/10 keep it up it definetly gets your mind thinking oh yeah the word play was phenominal........... |
haha, shit was really ill calm, liked how you incorporated music into it, and shit, and used dope meta's, flow was fucking hot like your mother, good imagery and decent vocab, you got a great imagination, nice drop famn, props.. rtf on my open mic, Metaphorically Speaking, or leave feed on it in poetic scriptures
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Thanx fam... i actually didnt think i was gon get any love on this one. lol
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great drop...it's nice to see a emcee use an extended metaphor. at first i didn't get it but afta i read through it again it really made sense. i dont know how anybody could sleep on dis 1. 9/10.....nominate dis 4 OM of tha month on tha real. stay up & rtf.1.
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thanks fam...
the feed is much appreciated |
This was an iight drop..
You had nice flow.. and thats what made your verse really good ..feeling was good , you had nice imagery, and some good wordplay, and vocab ..Structure was okay, next time try to match up your bars, and not make a line longer then then others.. Nice concept, good topic ..Alittle short , could have been alittle longer, felt it could have made it alittle better..overall keep it up . |
thanx fam uppinfor more feed
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Cool piece. Very creative using "the game" to symbolize "her". The imagery was nice and multis were pretty tight at the beginning of this and throughout the whole thing. You had good vocab. Never got off topic and your metaphores were a big plus in this piece. Flow was awesome and only off in a couple spots. Overall this piece was good and you have some great potential. Return the favor on the link in my sig. :)
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