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::...When The Guns Raise...::
Shit, When The Guns Raise........ It Goes Click & Spark..........Dislocates Your Blood From Hearts Tears Ya Limbs Apart...........Disects Lungs Until Breathin Stops Blast Quick, Take Away Lives.........Slash Thru You Like Knives Take Husbands From Wives, 'Left-Sex'....Its 'Fuckin You Right'! Cold.......Da Gat Shivers, Sensin Ya Nerve Like Visable Feelings Infectin Ya Hearin, 'MALE HUNGER'....Ya Blood Is Its 'Meal-Man' Brains Hittin Ceilings, Paused Motions........As Death Is Nearing Gunmen Fearing..............'RAIN SHOTS' Like 'Druken-Tearing'! Insides? Non-Existent.........Fake-Drops? No, Ya Falls-Realistic Hit Make Ya Lip-Stick, Den DUMP-FAST Shots Like Quick-Shits Necks Split, Heads Drip & 'Hand' Out Blood Like ORGAN GRIPS When Da Guns Raise, In A Flash Like Super-Heros..Lifes Extinct (1) Last Line...FLASH Is A Superhero...If You Was Lost $cream At Me... |
yo Man it Was Alright It A Simple Flow But u Can spit better than that cuz but it had no scheme to it but it was alright!>>7/10
i need some uppin on my Ghost Freestyle (OM) read n tell me whatcha think holla atcha boy |
Jeah.............Imma Peep Dat Namean..............Uppin
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It Goes Click & Spark..........Dislocates Your Blood From Hearts Tears Ya Limbs Apart...........Disects Lungs Until Breathin Stops ^^^^good startin.. but I didn't found a way Hearts & Stops rhymed Blast Quick, Take Away Lives.........Slash Thru You Like Knives Take Husbands From Wives, 'Left-Sex'....Its 'Fuckin You Right'! ^^^^damn, good line Cold.......Da Gat Shivers, Sensin Ya Nerve Like Visable Feelings Infectin Ya Hearin, 'MALE HUNGER'....Ya Blood Is Its 'Meal-Man' ^^^^ not that good Brains Hittin Ceilings, Paused Motions........As Death Is Nearing Gunmen Fearing..............'RAIN SHOTS' Like 'Druken-Tearing'! ^^^^ Good, good... the best in ur rap Insides? Non-Existent.........Fake-Drops? No, Ya Falls-Realistic Hit Make Ya Lip-Stick, Den DUMP-FAST Shots Like Quick-Shits ^^^^hmmm good Necks Split, Heads Drip & 'Hand' Out Blood Like ORGAN GRIPS When Da Guns Raise, In A Flash Like Super-Heros..Lifes Extinct ^^^^ Perfect Closing 8.7/10 very good man.... congrats RTF please |
This was pretty decent ,i wasnt feelin how short it was
structure was on point , nice flow Wordplay and vocab were decent , alittle simplicit.. You had some nice bars, good solid punches.. Overall this was a pretty decent drop..nothing more i could say it was just alittle short for me ..keep it up Drop a link or this will be closed |
Sounds like you study anatomy.
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nice drop cant be mad at this good creativity and shit vocab was good flow was pretty good structre almost perfect mad props for this piece 8/10
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this was ok, good flow and vocab in this shit, nah mean. work on ya punches a lil more, tho. you got multies down and structure and shit. i give it a 7/10 cuz ya really had no topic n ya rhyme scheme was a lil messed up, but overall it was a a solid drop wit some hot bars, nah mean..1...
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Jeah I Just Thought About Killin Lol........& Ran Wit Dat Idea........Nothin Serious I Knew It Wasnt Da Best But Hey.......Good Looks
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Jeah..............UPPIN This...................Stop Lookin If You Have Nothin 2 Say!
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