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~*Khatharsis*~ 06-09-05 08:25 PM

*Screams Of Silence*
 
Begone ye screams of silence, harbingers of pain,
Cloaked in isolation, you mock in harsh disdain,
My soul is torn usunder, I curse you God of Hell,
As you pierced my tortured soul, what horrors I befell,
You spoke of quiet solitude, to tempt me to your lair,
Then lanced me in my troubled heart to depths of dark despair.
Nemesis, I beg of thee, rise up in righteous ire,
Protect me from Tisiphone, from Hell's eternal fire,
With all my voice I scream to you, protect me from the night,
Alas, in desperation, I journey to the light,
Banished to mind's coventry, I heed the demon's call,
Beckoned by the silent screams, I enter Dante's Hall,
Drawn into the vortex, I hope and pray to find,
Total absolution, illusions of the mind?
Drowning in disharmony, upon a tranquil sea,
Adrift upon the river Styx, am blind but yet I see,
Bowing to Mephistopheles, as Faust I sell my soul,
Unto the Fallen Angels, at last I cede control,
On bended knee I enter, the world of waking dreams,
Final absolution, farewell to silent screams.

H-N-I-C 06-09-05 08:51 PM

Damn...this was a dope ass drop. Vocab was nice, emotion was very nice, and it's very apparent that you know about your topic...the references to mythological beings and places...excellent.

"On bended knee I enter, the world of waking dreams,"
"Final absolution, farewell to silent screams."

^^^....Lovin this
Overall...10/10

~*Khatharsis*~ 06-09-05 08:59 PM

thanks. man. well in poems i consider myself in a higher level of thinking. i really put work in it. uppin for more.

DQ 06-10-05 06:03 AM

I love your style for real, vocab was on point combined with excellent imagery and pure emotion. I am feeling the concept you went with here, for some people it might be a bit hard to understand because you use terms from the mythology and Ancient Egypt and all that ish but I felt it gave the poem something extra, that lil touch that a lot of poems miss you know.

Keep it up! :thumbup:

Rtf if you have time on any of the links in my sig...

~*Khatharsis*~ 06-11-05 12:48 AM

iiight thanks. really appreciate.

Cocaine 06-13-05 10:59 PM

wow this piece was very good.. man ur very consistent on your drops and they all seem to hit pretty hard...... good job

~*Khatharsis*~ 06-13-05 11:09 PM

thanks, i do my best

Adam 06-19-05 02:10 AM

http://www.netpoets.com/poems/depress/0164002.htm

Yes, Tim Chambers is quite good..

~*Khatharsis*~ 06-19-05 02:34 AM

yes he is. .

Os1ris 06-19-05 01:06 PM

lmao at you biting :shoot:


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