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..A Reaper's Pusuit..
as I walk down the street the sound of feet surround me a pounding beat astounds me as my heart profoundly leaps & with a leap & bound I speed around the corner & found the sound was still expounding I ran through town & still it found me as if it was bound to me as if we were bound to meet the bounty accounting for me must be astounding when in actuallity it was counting on a large amount of me with plans of mounting me & sucking the life out of me... how can I flee out from this demon of night when the might of a demon at night is so exceedingly frightening? the likening of which scares lightening from striking it as I split by the last street light I get inside a potent mist as I hope & wish my ghostly friend decendant of unholy trends would end his goal to win my soul or have me as a whole exempt then the mist begins to roll against my skin amidst the wind my throat gets pinched the hold is clinched the mold in which my soul is fit is folding in it's goin dim....as his face closes in I see an unwholesome grin...it's...it's...my own...shit.... |
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Yo i liked this alot.. Good shit man.. The Flow was awesome, it read very well, i also like your rhyme scheme.. made it flow alot better.. Anyway. the structure was good, Vocab was hot.. Good Drop. 8/10
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now thats good
one of the first good posts I've seen on the site only been here for 20 minutes but hey its still good...real good |
as I walk down the street the sound of feet surround me
a pounding beat astounds me as my heart profoundly nice how can I flee out from this demon of night when the might of a demon at night is so exceedingly frightening? i feel like ive found a peer here lol really nice rhyme scheme stayed on topic nice imagery mos def feeling this drop more than anything else ive given feed on so far hit my joints up |
this was good, vocab, flow, structure, imagery, everything was good on this, nice drop, keep em comin
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