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Old Friend
Beat: Dear Summer-Jayz N Memphis Bleek
I think the person this is directed to knows its to him chips ahoy=oreo(a old RV member) True Loyalty : a crew made up with me and him in it Jason=Wall Street but wont admit it and it's his alias(look it up) Morning of June 30th,4months later Im Back to the same place Only difference now is that alot of things have changed Remember the time it was True Loyalty,what happen homeboy? Suppose to keep it G,If so why you always hate on chips ahoy? And when the trouble busted out,I kept it from gettin too hectic We were each others watch out, But I guess ya got up and left it This unloyal event didnt cause damage,It only made me alert Realising now you a savage, I was only tryin to make shit work I helped you with punchlines and you did the same,but whats lame... You put down the verse on someone and claimed it with your name I'll admit I was kinda a dickryda, but I can explain this perfectly You were my homeboy,it was loyalty,I dont push away family... And ever since I came back,I've been havin these flashbacks Of Me,You and Kordozar talkin about recordin on a track But shits change cuz to you I can see its about Big Business How could I've missed this,When I have gods eye as my witness "Wheres Jason?"Kord. said "he someone else but wont admit" I guess the fame of his new name forces the dude not to say it Never wanted to log off , cuz back in the day RV was dope, Another friend is lost,guess all the money caused ya to deny hope... And how are you suppose to say ya respected,and not deny it When then people hated cuz ya dickride on yaself with all ya alias's And even then ya had no guilt,to say ya better than me How?when you needed my help,In reality you're trash to me Like Kordozar said "We Aint Cool You Changin Dude I Can't Find The Same Old You" thats all i have to say...been waiting to say this and get it off my chest... and dont try to spit something back towards me cuz everything about me we share equally...~1~ http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=198264 links |
goodlookin fam,i updated the first post with links...~1~
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a nice diss joint right here i hopefully will c more good shit from u keep writing ~1 Luv, 1 Thug~
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good stucture the flow is decent, emotion is very well the thing i didnt like was that you play rv like its real life, like these cats is really your homeboys, like to be honest man dont take thes einternet sites so serious most people is probably nerds, some not but anyway imagery was nice my most favorite bar was this:
I'll admit I was kinda a dickryda, but I can explain this perfectly You were my homeboy,it was loyalty,I dont push away family... good bar, keep it up man just try not to think of his more of a game, but really its not a game, kinda even ya feel me, 1 rtf links in the sig. |
^^thanks for the feed yall....
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wow some emotional shit.....
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Remember the time it was True Loyalty,what happen homeboy?
Suppose to keep it G,If so why you always hate on chips ahoy? what you talking about son? |
this was a pretty decent drop..structure was there..but you put the size=1 to make your structure look good..so i cant really judge off that.. your wordplay and vocab was okay..it could have been expanded alittle more...but like paranoid said this internet shyt shouldnt be taken seriously but it was a pretty good drop keep it up
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didnt UE die....but ya ill come back
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yeah thats what I thought too.
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