Get At Me
 

5 quick bars:

Come see my boyz if ya think ya block tougher/
Cause in my hood we Move- E , like Blockbuster/
U wanna battle me is that yo word, u trippin/
Cause I'm nice around mics, word to Pippen/
With the punchlines I mash u lames/
Cause the kid got more wordplay than Scrabble games/
Cause y'all know who the hardest is/
I'm like a freight train, I'm sick boy, I spit more, than a bus full of retarded kids/
If y'all want success y'all better stay out my way and be easy though/
Cause I can make y'all sit-com, like a TV show/
EASY

Explanation:
+ Sit-com = sit calm
--when I said I'll make' em sit-com, I meant sit calm but I had to break the word up to make it make sense. Most TV shows are sitcoms.

ur first bar was prob your only descent one in there. I know it's quick bars but i'm just telling your what i think about them. Your closer was weak, i mean i didn't even get the whole sit-com, how do you make someone sit-com? Keep up though, return the favor

pretty good nice word play rhymes were good flow was ehhh structre was fucked up but other then that it was nice good job homie
6/10

keep the ink on the page man

Good lookin on the feedback. If y'all like it or not I just wanna know what y'all think.

this was ok, as The Militant said your structure was off pretty bad, flow was decent, word play was good though....the / are not necessary, makes it even harder to read, again decent drop, keep it up

Good lookin on the feedback

It was nice but not really original. U beat me. But u can't beat again. That's my word


Back to the rhyme: I give it an 8/10. THe punchlines were crazy but I heard similar ones before..




8/10