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Black Queen 08-09-05 07:37 PM

Run Away With You ft Fate
 
Chorus
Baby I just wanna run away with you
I'll do anything just to lay with you
Take you by tha hand, walk tha bay with you
Sneak into your bed just to play with you
I just wanna spend everyday with you
Baby I just wanna run away with you


Black Queen
We can get in tha ride, run away for maybe a day or two
Cause there aint nothing I wouldn't do or say jus for you
So won't you pack your bags cause we leavin' for a while
I don't trust alota things but I'm believin' in your smile
In a couple'a more years we might be weavin' down tha aisle
But at the very moment...All I wanna be thievin' is your style
And if your questioning my love I tell you I truly do love you
You could be my knight in shining armor jus do the thangs you do
You can hold my right hand as we navigating through tha streets
And by tha time that I'm through you'll be swaying to this beat
You and Me just gotta be tha very best type of combination
We mean more to each other then tha entire population
Now lets dissapear, go away, I say we hide in hibernation
Cos I just want tha real you mah love, I expect no imitations
So won't you run away cos tha suffocation is so clear
We need some private time, no limitations I'll be here


Chorus

Fate
i'm overcome with enticing emotions...if only i could get away with you
somewhere distant for instance even if it's only for a day or two
allurement draws me closer girl it's like i need to have my way with you
when your around my mind disarrays i don't know what to say to you
i'm left in a daze for you....i'd wait days for you; to run away with you
you got a nigga goin crazy; point out a hater and i'll spray for you
picture us....side by side like bonnie and clyde.....forever i'll ride
our love never shall die, i promise to stay true to you for forever and i
will never regret............ or for that matter ever forget gettin with you
you just don't know how much it meant when u told me "i'm feelin u too"
and niggas don't know...but right now i'm confirmin it's true
nothin anybody can say or do will ever come between me and you
and as we meet up in this secretive place, i can hardly wait
to see your beautiful face; as we come nearer my heart begins to race
then as we kiss i'm left amidst a feeling of passion growing from within
as i leave i tell her how i feel........................then it all ends


Chorus

noname 08-09-05 08:19 PM

OK....

I ain't no fan of love songs....but I'ma try to be as unbaised as I can

The chrous was Ok.I was...w/e.

The flow was good.A little better on Fate's side of it.I ain't feelin the basic rhyme scheme...but in a song like this...I guess it's an exception this time.

Content...It was good..except for the fact that Fate's verse and BQ's were nearly identical.Both sayin...blah-blah..get away with you...blah-blah..I love you..blah-blah..forever love.....blah-blah.Bq's verse kept me awake because it came first...but Fate's verse was a repeat.I suggest the next time you collab..you agree on what you wanna rap about.SO you don't end up saying the same shit again.

SOme lines don't make sence
You could be my knight in shining armor jus do the thangs you do
^^wtf is this?....so he's your armor(meanin he be on top you :hump: )....if he did the things....or "thangs you do"?..seems to me you made this outta desperation...like you ain't know what the fuck you wanna say next.HE gotta do what you do to get in your pants? :huh:

SO...
Both of you have some talent there...but need to work on wording your shit better..and not repeating yourselves.

Ooh....and try to be creative god damn it!

All this.."i'll do the impossible to be with you" or "I'll kill whoever fucking with you"....is played like a mother fucker.BE CREATIVE.


If you don't mind...as I took time to read this...vote in one my battles in sig please?

noname 08-09-05 08:26 PM

ooh yeah.....you two make a cute couple :evilgrin:
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LoL.....j/p ya'll

Kawn Flixx 08-09-05 08:31 PM

Drop a link or this will be closed

noname 08-09-05 08:32 PM

^^^wooooooooo....someone seeming pissed...LoL....they ain't on right now tho....

Black Queen 08-09-05 09:09 PM

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2356305

Black Queen 08-09-05 09:10 PM

n thx fo the feed NK

PrahJect 08-09-05 09:23 PM

yo chekd shit out...nice lil collabo here...yo BQ had the better verse IMO...fate u came ok...but BQ held it IMO...wud be a good audio

BQ - 8/10
Fate - 6/10

Good job...RTF in my open mic TAINTED SOUL:

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=203811

taz 08-10-05 01:06 AM

this piece was iight 8/10 over all liked it a lot rtf if u want

Payn 08-11-05 11:19 AM

it was ight assuming dat b.q came wit it on diz piece & seemed more up 4 it, den fate
cuz he did a half-azz job of writing a decent verse but overall it could have been alot betta wit b.q & anotha guy who is alot more lyrically up 2 par but b.q= 8.5/10; fate= 4/10
step ya game up next time ight

rtf: http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=204043

noname 08-11-05 12:14 PM

I swear....ya'll forever on BQ's dick..or pussy...w/e.

Because Fate clearly had a better verse...I bet ya'll ain't even read the damn thing.Just cause BQ's more popular don't mean shit.

Black Queen 08-15-05 11:52 AM

n y are u gettin mad cus sum1 has dey opinion

noname 08-15-05 01:55 PM

^^LOL....ite...sry....I'll stop... :kid:

~Tony Green~ 08-15-05 03:28 PM

^^^This nigga gay ass hell yall both did good liked the concept of this right here hook was hot and so was the verses good job both of you!

noname 08-15-05 04:41 PM

Quote:
Originally Posted by Tony Green
^^^This nigga gay ass hell yall both did good liked the concept of this right here hook was hot and so was the verses good job both of you!



Dawg....either battle me...or hush up....and people who only leave one sentence postive feedback are d/r's who didn't even read the verse.

Don't even front TG...you ain't read the verse...you internet gangsta :bored:

Fuck off....


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